Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart below illustrates the observedd danger and actual liklihood of being a crime victim.

However here are two type of bars which represents perceived and actual victims of crimes in the year of 2009/10 and 2010/2011. The graph here compares three types of war crimes through these bar charts which are burglary, Car crime and violent crime.

For year 2009/10 the burglary crime perception was about 15 percent as compared to the actual which was less than 5 percent in this time period. The same trend is nearly obeserved for the other two crimes which are car crime annd violent crime. The car crime for year 2009/10 was the highest to be perceived that year crossing 20% whiuile the actual for that year was about les than 5 percent. As for the violent crime in 2009/10 it was perceived to be 15 percent and as for actual it was still less tan 5 percent.

The year 2010/11 was the year where these crimes seen visible reduction as compared to the year 2009/10.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover the main features of the chart, comparing perceived and actual likelihood across burglary, car crime, and violent crime for two periods. However, there are notable misinterpretations of the data, such as referring to 'war crimes' instead of crime types, and stating that 2010/11 saw a visible reduction across the board when figures show mixed trends (e.g., actual burglary and violent crime actually increased slightly). Furthermore, the data description is somewhat repetitive and lacks full development of all key comparisons. This performance aligns with a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text is organized into brief paragraphs, but the overall progression is disjointed. Introductory sentences are somewhat confusing ('However here are two type of bars...'). Cohesive devices are used mechanically or inappropriately, and referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly with the abrupt shift in the final sentence. Paragraphing is rudimentary, with a very short concluding sentence that fails to properly synthesize the data. This reflects Band 5.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and limited ('observedd', 'liklihood', 'whiuile', 'tan'). There are several spelling mistakes ('observedd', 'liklihood', 'obeserved', 'annd', 'whiuile', 'tan') and a severe lexical error by referring to 'war crimes' instead of general crimes. While there is an attempt to use vocabulary related to data (e.g., 'perception', 'trend', 'highest'), the lexical control is weak and sometimes impedes communication. This fits a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control is inconsistent. There are numerous grammatical errors, such as missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'The car crime for year 2009/10 was the highest to be perceived that year crossing 20% whiuile the actual for that year was about les than 5 percent'). Punctuation is also weak in places. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, matching Band 5.0.

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