Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates a comparision between the crime committed and perceived danger situation by the person with in the period of two years .

Over all it can be seen that car crimes is leading in the actual and perceived crime followed by the burglary and violent crime . As per the chart the actual crime remains same for all the victim categories through out the period except for burglary .Chart reflect that there is huge difference recorded in perceived crimes in 2009 comparatively then 2010 .

The actual illegal activites reported to the car is nearly 4% with in the given period whereas the people find himself in a danger situation around 21 % which falls substantially in 2010 around 16% .Moreover the offensive participation in violent and burglary account for nearly 3 and 2.5% while perceiving a threat and physical risk maintain its position for both remaining crimes which are 15% later reduce to 14%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the prompt by summarising the main features of the bar chart regarding perceived and actual crime. An overview is provided, noting that car crime leads in both categories, followed by burglary and violent crime. However, the response contains several inaccuracies in reading the data. For instance, the student states that actual crime remained the same for all categories except burglary, which is incorrect as car crime and violent crime also saw minor changes. Furthermore, figures like 'nearly 4%' for car crime and '21%' for perceived danger contain some approximations that diverge from the exact chart values, and the description of data trends is somewhat confused and difficult to follow.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text is divided into three paragraphs, including an introduction and a brief overview. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow due to poor logical sequencing and abrupt transitions. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'Chart reflect that' and 'Moreover the offensive participation'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard to connect pronouns and descriptors to the correct data points. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within sentences and paragraphs breaks down frequently.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The lexical range is limited and contains numerous inappropriate word choices and collocations. Examples include 'crime committed and perceived danger situation', 'offensive participation', and 'physical risk maintain its position'. There are also frequent spelling and morphological errors, such as 'comparision', 'Over all', 'activites', and 'comparatively then'. While the basic topic vocabulary is present, the frequent misuse of terms restricts clarity and prevents the response from achieving a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent, persistent errors throughout the response, including subject-verb agreement issues ('car crimes is leading', 'actual crime remains same'), incorrect prepositions ('reported to the car', 'with in the given period'), and awkward phrasing ('the people find himself in a danger situation'). Punctuation and spacing errors are also common. These errors frequently cause strain for the reader.

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