Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart illustrate preceived and likelihood of being a victim of crime namelliy by crime type Preceived 2009/10, Actual 2009/10, Preceived 2010/11 and Actual 2010/11.

Overall, it can be seen that the highest crime perceived 2009/10 was around 21% in car crime. while the lowest crime actual 2009/10 was around 3% in burglary, and car crime are 4% in actual 2009 to 2011 same percentage.

In perceived crime are burglary was 13% , car crime 17% and violent crime 14% in 2010 to 2011. when the perceived and actual are both slitlly diffrent. on other hand, the actual are very low crime percentage in 2009 to 2011.

In conculsion, over all the given bar graph show actual likelihood of victim of crime is higest is the perceived in 2009 to 2011 and while other actual show in crime percentage low.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response makes an attempt to summarise the bar chart regarding the perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime. However, the word count is 141 words, which fails to meet the minimum requirement of 150 words, resulting in a necessary penalty. Furthermore, the selection of features is somewhat confused, with inaccurate reading of specific data points (e.g. stating car crime in actual 2009 to 2011 was 4% when it is 4.5%, and phrasing data comparisons confusingly). While an overview is attempted, it is awkwardly expressed and lacks precision. Ideas are under-developed and the overall response is brief and poorly structured, leading to a Band 4.5 evaluation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text is divided into short paragraphs, but logical progression is severely disrupted by poor sentence structure and fragmented thoughts. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as 'on other hand' and 'In conculsion, over all'. Referencing is unclear throughout, making it difficult to follow the relationships between data points. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs fails to guide the reader smoothly through the response. This performance aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical range is very limited and basic, with frequent spelling mistakes throughout the text (e.g. 'illustrate' instead of 'illustrates', 'preceived' instead of 'perceived', 'namelliy' instead of 'namely', 'slitlly' instead of 'slightly', 'diffrent' instead of 'different', 'conculsion' instead of 'conclusion', 'higest' instead of 'highest'). The student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary such as 'perceived', 'actual', and 'likelihood', but these are undermined by severe spelling errors and imprecise phrasing that occasionally strains the reader's understanding. This reflects a Band 4.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of sentence structures. Most complex sentences attempted are faulty, such as 'Overall, it can be seen that the highest crime perceived 2009/10 was around 21% in car crime. while the lowest crime actual 2009/10 was around 3% in burglary...' which misuses punctuation and fragments clauses. There are frequent errors in verb-subject agreement, tense usage, and prepositions. These errors cause persistent difficulty for the reader and mean the grammar sits firmly within Band 4.0.

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