Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph depicts the perceived threat and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Overall, it is clear that, the ratio of perceived crimes remained high as compared to, the actual crime.

However, the figure of actual crime remained fluctuating and stayed moderate; in addition, the highest ratio of crimes was recorded in car crime.

From 2009 to 2010, the share of perceived crime remained elevated in all categories of crimes, such as burglary crime, car crime, and violent crime. In burglary crime the ratio of victims is just over 15%, as compared to the actual victims which was approximately 2.5%. However these figures must be elevated in car crime, where the ratio of perceived crime is about 21%, while the actual crime ratio is just under 5%.

Between 2010 and 2011, the share of perceived crime was also high. Meanwhile, the ratio of actual crime in all categories also witnessed a slight increase. Additionally, the lowest figures of actual and perceived crimes were recorded in burglary crime approximately 13% and 2.5% respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by selecting and reporting the main features of the chart, successfully noting that perceived crime rates were significantly higher than actual likelihoods across all categories. An overview is present, highlighting the general dominance of perceived crime and identifying car crime as having the highest figures. However, some areas are under-developed or imprecise; for instance, the student states that data spans from '2009 to 2010' and 'Between 2010 and 2011', whereas the chart displays specific snapshot years (2009/10 and 2010/11) rather than a continuous progression over time. Additionally, some data points contain minor inaccuracies, such as mixing up perceived and actual figures in the final paragraph regarding burglary. To reach a higher level, the student should ensure clearer distinction between static data comparisons and dynamic trends, whilst ensuring all reported figures are meticulously checked against the visual data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response exhibits a coherent overall arrangement with a logical progression of ideas. Information is divided into a clear introduction, an overview paragraph, and distinct body paragraphs examining different periods or crime types. Cohesive devices are employed to link ideas, such as 'Overall', 'However', and 'Additionally'. Nevertheless, cohesion is at times mechanical or slightly faulty, such as the awkward transition 'Meanwhile, the ratio of actual crime in all categories also witnessed a slight increase', which does not smoothly contrast with the preceding sentence about perceived crime. Furthermore, referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in phrases like 'these figures must be elevated in car crime', where 'these figures' clumsily refers back to statistics from a different category. Paragraphing is used adequately, but smoother inter-sentential connections and more varied cohesive links would elevate the structural flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, successfully conveying meaning regarding percentages and crime categories such as 'burglary crime', 'car crime', and 'violent crime'. The writer attempts less common vocabulary, such as 'perceived threat', 'elevated', and 'fluctuating', showing an acceptable range for this level. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'the ratio of perceived crimes remained high' instead of 'percentage' or 'proportion', and 'these figures must be elevated', where 'higher' or 'greater' would be more natural than 'elevated' in that context. Spelling is generally accurate, but occasional lexical imprecisions prevent the response from achieving a higher band. Incorporating more precise, data-focused terminology would enhance the precision of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing structures like 'It is clear that...' and subordinate clauses beginning with 'as compared to'. There are some grammatical errors and punctuation issues present, such as intrusive commas ('it is clear that, the ratio...', 'compared to, the actual crime'), awkward prepositional use, and slight tense inconsistencies. However, these errors rarely impede communication and the reader can easily follow the intended meaning. The grammatical control reflects a standard where simple structures are generally reliable, while attempts at more complex configurations introduce some mistakes. To improve, the student needs to eliminate intrusive punctuation, refine article usage before statistical terms, and ensure greater accuracy when constructing complex comparative clauses.

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