Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph depicts the information about percentage of victim of crime in year 2009/10 and 2010/11. It shows the perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime for both years. It is differentiated by crime type.

Initially, in year 2009/10, percentage of perceived car crime is more than in year 2010/11 as it is above 20 percent .However, actual percentage is vry low in both years and they are equal which is approximately 4%.

Furthurmore, for burglary and violent crime perceived percentage is equal which is about 15% and 13% approximately in year 2009/10 and 2010/11 respectively. However, actual likelihood is far less in both years for both crimes. For burglary it is 2% and 3% approximately for year 2009/10 and 2010/11 respectively. Whereas for violent crime its actual percentage is equal in both years which is 4% approximately.

Overall, it can be conclude that, there is so much difference in perceived and actual crime report in both years. Actula likelihood of being victim of crime is more for car crime.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the main parts of the task by reporting the key figures for perceived and actual crime rates across the two years and three crime types. However, some aspects of the information are under-developed or inaccurately generalized. For instance, the writer states that the actual percentage for violent crime is 'equal in both years which is 4% approximately', whereas the data shows it was 3% in 2009/10 and 3.5% in 2010/11. The overview is also somewhat simplistic, stating that 'there is so much difference in perceived and actual crime report', which lacks precision and fails to highlight the most salient overall trends effectively. To reach a higher band, the response would need to select and compare key features more accurately and provide a fully developed overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The text demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt at paragraphing, separating the introduction, body paragraphs for specific crime types, and an overview. Cohesive devices such as 'Initially', 'Furthurmore', and 'Overall' are used to signal the progression of ideas, which helps the reader follow the text. However, referencing and cohesion are occasionally mechanical or slightly repetitive. For example, moving between the years and crime types sometimes feels abrupt. To achieve a higher band, the logical relationships between sentences and paragraphs would need to be smoother and more sophisticated, ensuring the information flows seamlessly without relying on basic transitional markers.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to communicate basic comparisons using terms like 'percentage', 'perceived', 'actual', and 'likelihood'. However, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'vry' (very), 'Furthurmore' (Furthermore), and 'Actula' (Actual). The writer also tends to repeat words like 'percentage', 'years', and 'approximately' rather than using synonyms or varying sentence structures. To improve to a higher band, the student needs to incorporate a wider range of less common lexical items with greater precision and eliminate spelling errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response exhibits a mix of simple and some complex sentence forms, such as 'It shows the perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime for both years.' There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings, including missing articles ('percentage of victim of crime' instead of 'percentage of victims of crime') and issues with subject-verb agreement or prepositions. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to restrict the score at this level. To attain a higher band, the student must demonstrate better control over complex sentence structures and improve grammatical accuracy, particularly regarding articles, plurals, and prepositional usage.

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