Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graphs illustrates the percieved danger and actual likelihood of being a victom of crime by crime type.
Overall, the graphs show that the perceived percentages are lot higher than the actual likelihood of being a victom of crime for both 2009 and 2010. Secondly, car crime in 2009 and 2010 was significantly higher than Burglary and Voilent crime.
In 2009, Car crime was accounted for 21%, whereas Voilent crime and Burglary both accounted for 15%, also it can be seen that actual likelihood was significantly lower than perceived. In 2010 Burlary and Voilent crime both accounted for 13% for perceived, whereas car crime is still higher than both other at 17% but dropped by 4% from 2009.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the task only partially and fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, ending at 118 words. While you attempt to summarize the main features and make some comparisons, the selection of data is limited. You successfully identify that perceived danger is much higher than actual likelihood and highlight car crime as the highest category, but details are sometimes vague or inaccurate. For instance, stating that burglary and violent crime 'both accounted for 15%' in 2009 overlooks the actual distinctions in the chart (burglary was 15.5% and violent crime was 15.5% for perceived, but actual figures differed). Furthermore, the overview is brief and underdeveloped, lacking a full synthesis of the two years shown.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
There is some basic organization with an introduction, an overview paragraph, and a body paragraph, but the essay lacks a clear overall progression. Paragraphing is attempted, but the body of the response is cramped into a single, dense block of text rather than being logically separated. Cohesive devices are basic and sometimes repetitive or mechanical, such as the frequent use of 'whereas' and the sequence marker 'Secondly'. Reference words are occasionally unclear, and the mechanical flow suffers due to abrupt shifts between the years and crime types without adequate linking to guide the reader smoothly through the data comparisons.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task, containing noticeable spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally distract the reader. Words like 'percieved' and 'victom' are misspelled, and 'Burlary' and 'Voilent' show recurring spelling slips. Collocations and word forms are basic, with awkward phrasing such as 'Car crime was accounted for 21%' (incorrect passive construction) and 'higher than both other at 17%'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are hindered by these inaccuracies, restricting the lexical range to a lower band level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You demonstrate a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences and basic complex forms that are often faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues and incorrect prepositions or verb voices, as seen in 'The graphs illustrates' (singular/plural mismatch) and 'Car crime was accounted for 21%'. Punctuation is generally rudimentary, and run-on or comma-splice tendencies appear, such as in the second body paragraph ('...whereas Voilent crime and Burglary both accounted for 15%, also it can be seen...'). These persistent errors require some effort from the reader to decode.
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