Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph compares the information about perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Overall, it noticed that car crime had a highest ratio of being a victim in both perceived and actual likelihhod. While the burglary had the least number of the crime ratio.
Firstly, it seemed that the crime ratio in the burglary and violent crime in the perceived likelihood were the same ratios of 15% and 13% significantly in 2009, 2010 and 2011. Additionally, in 2010 and 2011 being a victim of crime in the burglary in actual likelihood was 2% and 3% in 2010 and 2011. However, in the voilent crime were the same ratios from 2009 to 2011 was 3%.
Furthermore, being a victim of the car crime in perceived likelihood had the highest proportion of crime around 21% in 2009/10 but it decreased to 17% in 2010/11.
At last, the ratio of the car crime had the equal ratios of 4% in actual likelihood between 2009 and 2011.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the task partially by reporting some main features and making limited comparisons from the chart. While it correctly identifies that car crime had the highest perceived and actual likelihood and burglary had lower figures, the selection and presentation of data lack clarity. Some data points are inaccurately reported or confused, such as stating that burglary and violent crime shared the exact same perceived ratios of 15% and 13% across 2009, 2010, and 2011, which does not accurately reflect the specific year-on-year breakdown in the chart. Furthermore, the overview is somewhat simplistic, noting only general high and low points without effectively capturing the overall trends, such as the massive gap between perceived danger and actual likelihood across all crime types.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
There is a basic organization to the response, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding sentence, but it lacks a clear overall progression. Paragraphing is attempted, though logical grouping of ideas is somewhat weak. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and repetitively throughout the text, such as starting multiple sentences with 'Firstly', 'Additionally', 'However', 'Furthermore', and 'At last'. Referencing and linking between sentences are occasionally clumsy, making the flow disjointed. For instance, transitional phrases do not always appropriately signal the logical relationship between the contrasting data points of perceived and actual crime rates.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices that recur throughout the response, such as writing 'likelihhod' (spelling), 'highest ratio of being a victim' instead of proportion or rate, 'least number of the crime ratio', and 'voilent crime' (spelling). The student attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'perceived likelihood' and 'proportion', but inaccuracies in word form, spelling, and collocation occasionally cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the vocabulary from reaching a higher level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple or awkwardly constructed complex forms that are often faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the car crime', 'the burglary'), prepositions ('in the burglary in actual likelihood'), and subject-verb agreement or tense consistency, such as 'it noticed that' and 'in the voilent crime were the same ratios'. These frequent errors require the reader to occasionally puzzle over the meaning, though the general topic remains discernible.
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