Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given graph demonstrates data of percieved and actual likelihood of being a victim of a crime from 2009 to 2010. In October 2009, the percentage of actual crime of burglary, car crime, and voilent crime was approximately 2%, 4%, and 3% respectively. The following year, 2010 it remained same for all mentioned crimes except burglary which was slightly raised by 1%. However, the percieved liklihood of being the victim of crime in October 2009 was reported to be approximately 15%, 21% 15% for burglary, car crime, and violent crime respectively and the percieved one in October 2010 for these crimes was almost 13%, 17%, and 14% respectively.

In conclusion the graph shows that the percentage of percieved crime slightly declined from October 2009 to 2010 while the actual crime claimed by victims remains at almost consistent percentage. Moreover, this data illustrates the reality that the likelihood of being an actual victim of crime is far less than the perceived one.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons across the given categories. An overview is successfully presented in the concluding paragraph, highlighting the general trend and the main contrast between perceived and actual crime. However, some parts of the task are developed more fully than others; for instance, the temporal references are slightly inaccurate as the chart covers periods across 2009/10 and 2010/11 rather than specific months like 'October 2009', and the data points are rounded or generalized rather than fully detailed. To reach a higher band, the data reporting needs to be more precise regarding the given time frames and figures, ensuring complete accuracy when extracting information from the visual prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The text demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a clear progression from the introduction of specific data points to an overarching summary in the conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the detailed body data from the concluding overview. Cohesive devices such as 'However', 'The following year', and 'Moreover' are employed to guide the reader through the comparisons, although referencing and transitions can occasionally feel a bit mechanical. To move towards a higher band, the connections between sentences could be made more seamless and flexible, avoiding slight over-reliance on basic sequence markers and ensuring that referencing within the data comparisons is handled with greater clarity.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully conveying the general meaning of the data with appropriate terms such as 'percentage', 'victim', and 'declined'. There are, however, noticeable spelling and word choice errors, including 'percieved' (perceived), 'voilent' (violent), and 'liklihood' (likelihood). The writer attempts less common vocabulary, but these inaccuracies slightly restrict precision. To achieve a higher band, spelling must be carefully monitored, and a wider range of more sophisticated, less common lexical items should be incorporated with accurate collocations and word forms to describe statistical trends more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating the ability to structure comparative statements, such as using 'while the actual crime claimed by victims remains at almost consistent percentage'. There are some grammatical errors, such as article omissions and prepositions inside patterns, as well as tense inconsistencies like 'remains' instead of 'remained'. However, these errors rarely impede communication and the meaning remains clear. To progress to a higher band, the writer needs to produce a greater proportion of error-free sentences when using complex structures and maintain strict consistency across verb tenses when reporting past statistical data.

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