Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph demonstrate the percentage of different crimes such as burglary ,car crime or violent crime in between 2009 to 2011 .

To begin with, in 2009 burglary and violent are remain same in perceived moreover perceived 2010/11 are also at same point .however car crime at the higest in both years as compared burglary and violent .

2009/10 perceived burglary and violent crime is 15% whereas car crime have 21% .In actiuall these are all less then 5% .2010/11 perceived car crime is still the most 17% burglary and voilent crime both are the same again . meanwhile actuall nothig has changed lower then 5 %

in summary , there are some significant changes in the line graph but the noticeable thing is that all the crimes are at same condition .whereas in 2009/10 crimes ration rise on the other hand 2010/11 vitcim drops the crime ratio. rather then rising the crime .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s main categories and make relevant comparisons, including that perceived risk is higher for car crime and that actual figures are below 5%. You also report several approximate values accurately, such as 21% for perceived car crime in 2009/10 and 17% in 2010/11. However, the overview is unclear and includes unsupported or inaccurate claims: “all the crimes are at same condition” overlooks the changes in perceived figures, while “crimes ratio rise” and “victim drops the crime ratio” do not clearly describe what the chart measures. Actual likelihoods also changed slightly between years, rather than remaining unchanged. To strengthen the response, give a precise overview of the large gap between perceived and actual risk, and describe the modest year-to-year changes accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs and attempts to guide the reader with phrases such as “To begin with” and “in summary.” It also groups some comparisons by year, which gives the information a basic structure. However, progression is difficult to follow because the opening paragraph, data paragraph and conclusion repeat points without developing a clear sequence. Connectors such as “moreover,” “however” and “meanwhile” are sometimes used where the relationship between ideas is unclear, and the final sentence is especially hard to interpret. Organise the report into a clear introduction, overview and two data-focused paragraphs; use linking words only when they accurately show contrast or addition, and make each sentence’s comparison explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “perceived,” “actual” and “compared,” and you attempt to describe rankings with “the most.” This gives you a basic range for reporting the data. However, repeated and inaccurate expressions limit precision: “crimes ratio,” “at same condition” and “victim drops the crime ratio” do not clearly convey the chart’s meaning. Several spelling errors, including “higest,” “actiuall,” “voilent” and “vitcim,” also make the report less clear. Build a more accurate set of terms for likelihood and comparison, and check spelling carefully. For example, describe figures as “perceived risk” or “actual likelihood,” rather than referring vaguely to a crime ratio.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can generally recognise the intended comparisons. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors often make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “The bar graph demonstrate,” “burglary and violent are remain same,” and “car crime have 21%,” where agreement and verb forms are faulty. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, as in “moreover perceived 2010/11 are also at same point .however”. Use a consistent past-tense reporting pattern, check subject–verb agreement, and separate complete sentences with appropriate punctuation. Short, accurate comparisons would help before attempting more complex structures.

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