Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given bar graph shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime dring four years from 2009 to 2011 in three types of crime,namely burglary, car crime and violent crime.
Overall, the percentage of perceived danger and actual likelihood was the highest in 2009/10 in car crime while the figure remained same for actual likelihood in 2010/11.Similarly the percentage of perceived danger was the lowest in 2010/11 while the percentage of actual likelihood was the lowest in 2009/2010.
Burglary ysed to
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response identifies the chart’s topic and names the three crime types, and it attempts an overview by comparing perceived danger with actual likelihood. However, it is far too incomplete to summarise the main features: the final line, “Burglary ysed to”, is unfinished, and there are no supporting figures or comparisons across the crime types. The overview also misstates the pattern: perceived danger was highest for car crime in both years, not only in 2009/10, while actual likelihood was highest for car crime in both years. The response contains 73 words, below the required 150; the 13 words copied from the prompt are excluded. Include a complete overview and select key figures to support it.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening sentence followed by a paragraph beginning “Overall”. The overview marker helps signal the purpose of the second paragraph. However, the response has no clear progression beyond this point: “Burglary ysed to” is an incomplete fragment, and the reader is left without the promised details or a conclusion. The linking word “Similarly” does not introduce a clearly parallel comparison, since the following statement shifts between perceived and actual figures. To improve coherence, complete each paragraph, group comparisons logically (for example, perceived versus actual figures), and use linking expressions only where the relationship between ideas is clear.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “perceived danger”, “actual likelihood”, “percentage” and the three crime labels. This gives it a minimally adequate vocabulary base for describing the chart. However, the range is narrow, and several expressions are imprecise or awkward, such as “the percentage … was the highest” and “the figure remained same”. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “dring” and “ysed”, which reduce the clarity and polish of the response. Use accurate chart language such as “proportion”, “stood at” and “was unchanged”, and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would also help distinguish perceived risk from recorded likelihood.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response includes a few complete sentence forms, including the opening sentence and the overview, and it attempts a comparison using “while”. However, the range is limited, and errors occur in basic sentence construction and punctuation. In “the figure remained same”, the article is missing; the comma spacing in “crime,namely” is incorrect; and “Burglary ysed to” is an incomplete sentence. The long overview sentence also joins several comparisons without making their relationships fully clear. Practise writing complete, controlled sentences with accurate articles and punctuation, then add a small range of comparison structures. Ensure every sentence has a complete clause before submitting.
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