Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime by different crime types over the two years timeframe from 2009 to 2011.

Overall, perceived danger by car crime peaked in 2009/2010 contributing for almost 22 percent, while actual likelihood of being a victim of crime by both car crime and violent crime approximately remained constant in their respected years.

Burglary crime was a great threat to people in the first year but, in the following year it reduced slightly while there is marginal increase in the original threat by thr burglary in the later year.Car crime as a perceived threat hit a peak in former year before reducing dramatically in the next year.

In both the years the original threat of crime by car remained plateaued.Violent crime was as same as burglary crime in the category of perceived threat while there is a negligible increase in violent crime as a original threat to the people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s topic and make some relevant comparisons, including the higher perceived risk of car crime and the slight rise in actual violent crime. However, the response does not give a clear, accurate overview of the main pattern: perceived figures were much higher than actual figures for all three crimes, and perceived risk fell for every crime type in 2010/11. Some statements are unclear or inaccurate, such as saying burglary was “a great threat” and that perceived violent crime was “as same as” burglary, without explaining the figures. The response also contains 143 words, below the required 150; 21 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count. Add a concise overview and support comparisons with accurate data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, an overall statement, and further comments on the crime types. This gives the reader some sense of the chart’s organisation. However, ideas are not arranged coherently enough, and several points are repeated or difficult to follow. For example, the discussion of car crime says both that perceived risk fell and that actual risk remained level, but these points are separated and phrased unclearly. The sentence beginning “Burglary crime was a great threat” combines a fall in perceived risk with a rise in actual risk without clearly distinguishing the two series. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and key comparisons, and connect each figure explicitly to its year and measure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “perceived threat,” “actual likelihood,” “peaked,” and “remained constant.” These choices show an attempt to describe trends rather than simply list categories. However, several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, which makes the comparisons less precise: “contributing for almost 22 percent,” “original threat,” and “a great threat” do not clearly describe the chart’s percentages. There are also spelling and word-form slips, such as “thr burglary” and “plateaued” used where “remained stable” would be more natural. Aim for standard data-reporting collocations and use “perceived risk” and “actual victimisation rate” consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “while” and a time clause beginning “in the following year.” However, errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences hard to interpret. For example, “actual likelihood … by both car crime and violent crime approximately remained constant” has an unclear structure, while “while there is marginal increase” shifts tense and omits an article. The sentence “Violent crime was as same as burglary crime” also has faulty comparative construction. Keep the past tense consistent when reporting the years, check articles and subject–verb agreement, and divide long sentences when they contain several comparisons.

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