Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

I see in this picture that crimes ratio are written in x -axis and percentages are written on y-axis. In this picture ,there are 3 types of crimes are given .first crime in this picture is Burglary and second one is Car crime and the last one Voilent crime.the car crime is highest as compare to the burglary and voilient crime in this given graph. Y -axis is describing percentage of the crimes and X-axis is demonstrating names of crimes .IT is very easy to understand things from the graph rather than in the written form. Burglary and voilent crime has almost equal percentages on the given graph .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the three crime categories and correctly note that car crime has the highest figures, while burglary and violent crime are broadly similar. However, the response does not summarise the chart’s main comparisons between perceived and actual risk or between the two years. For example, perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation in every category, and perceived figures fall from 2009/10 to 2010/11, while actual figures rise slightly or remain stable. No figures are reported to support your observations. The response is also below the required 150 words, which leaves the task substantially incomplete. Include a clear overview and select key data to illustrate these trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the axes, names the crime types, and then makes a couple of comparisons. This gives the reader some sense of the subject, and the point that car crime is highest is easy to locate. However, the ideas are presented as one continuous paragraph without a clear overview or progression from general trends to supporting details. Repeated explanations of the axes, such as “Y-axis is describing percentage” and “X-axis is demonstrating names,” do not advance the summary. Use a short introduction, an overview, and a paragraph comparing the figures, with linking phrases such as “By contrast” and “In both years” to make relationships clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentages,” “Burglary,” “Car crime,” and “highest,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is narrow and several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “crimes ratio,” “as compare to,” and “almost equal percentages.” Spelling errors in “Voilent” and “voilient” also reduce accuracy. The phrase “written form” is not useful for describing the data and takes space away from precise comparisons. Build a small set of accurate terms for describing chart data, such as “perceived risk,” “actual likelihood,” “higher than,” “declined,” and “remained stable,” and check spelling of the crime categories.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most of your sentences communicate a basic idea, and you attempt both simple statements and a comparison. However, sentence structures are repetitive, and errors in agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries are frequent enough to make the writing less controlled. For example, “crimes ratio are written” has subject–verb agreement problems, while “there are 3 types of crimes are given” combines two incompatible structures. “Burglary and voilent crime has” also needs plural agreement. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, particularly in “.first” and “IT.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related points with clauses such as “Although perceived risk fell, actual figures changed only slightly.”

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