Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given bar graph demonstrate the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

It is observed from the bar chart that, the highest proportion of burglary perceived crime in 2009 were almost 15%. Whereas, actual was only 3% in 2009 and in 2010 increased by 1%.

Moving onto, the car crime in 2009 were considerably higer than others by the proportion of 22%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s topic and attempts to report figures, but it covers only a small part of the data. It mentions perceived burglary in 2009 and car crime, yet gives no overview of the main pattern, omits violent crime and most 2010/11 comparisons, and does not explain that perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation across all three crime types. Some figures are also inaccurate: perceived burglary is about 15.5%, not simply “almost 15%,” and actual burglary rises from about 2% to 2.5%, rather than increasing by 1%. The response is 55 words, below the required 150; 12 words copied from the prompt were excluded. To improve, provide a clear overview and compare the key categories and years using accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by comments on burglary and car crime, with “Whereas” and “Moving onto” signalling transitions. However, the response ends before it develops a complete summary, so the information does not progress through all the chart’s categories or reach a concluding overview. The link “Whereas” is not used to form a complete contrast, and the comma after “bar chart” interrupts the sentence unnecessarily. Grouping the data into a paragraph about perceived risk and another about actual likelihood, then comparing the two years within each, would make the progression clearer. Use linking expressions only where the relationship between the figures is explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “perceived danger,” “actual likelihood,” “proportion,” and “increased,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the vocabulary range is narrow and some combinations are unnatural or imprecise: “the highest proportion of burglary perceived crime” is difficult to interpret, while “actual was only 3%” does not clearly identify actual burglary victimisation. There are also spelling errors in “higer” and an awkward use of “Moving onto” before a category. Aim for precise chart language such as “the perceived risk of burglary” and “the actual rate of victimisation.” Vary “proportion” with terms such as “percentage” or “rate,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both a simple opening and longer sentences, but grammatical control is inconsistent. In “The given bar graph demonstrate,” the singular subject requires “demonstrates.” The phrase “It is observed from the bar chart that, the highest proportion…” has an unnecessary comma and an incomplete, awkwardly structured clause. In “the highest proportion … were,” the verb does not agree with the singular head noun, and “the car crime in 2009 were” also has faulty agreement. The sentence beginning “Whereas” is a fragment rather than a complete contrast. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, and punctuation. A wider range of accurate sentence patterns would make the comparisons easier to follow.

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