Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart displays being a victim of crime under perceived vs actual and its respective crime time which depicts burglary, car crime, violent crime. The time line shows crimes occured in 2009/2010 and 2010/2011. The chart was plotted with percentage vs crime type.

Bruglary had went down in the perceived 2009/10 vs perceived 2010/11 where as actual 2009/10 vs actual 2010/11 has a moderate expansion. Moving on to car crime which was the highest noted crime among all three have collapsed from above 20 to nearing 15, yet the actual stayed the same. Violent crime graph depicts as same as burglary graph from 2009/10, in addition to that with no minimal changes perceived 2010/11 for both graphs stands intact with no difference. In comparison with actual in 2009/10 to actual of 2010/11 of violent crime the chart shows a stadiness in the plot. On an average comparison in all the three crime there is decrease in every crime under perceived in 2009/2010 however actual staued the same or had a minimal raise in all the cases.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and make relevant comparisons across the three crime types and two periods. The main pattern is partly captured: perceived likelihood falls, while actual likelihood changes little or rises slightly; you also correctly note that car crime is highest and its actual figure is unchanged. However, there is no clear, concise overview, and some descriptions are inaccurate or too vague. For example, violent crime’s perceived figure falls slightly, rather than remaining “intact with no difference,” and actual burglary and violent crime rise modestly rather than showing “steadiness.” Include the key contrast between perceived and actual levels, then support it with a few accurate figures to make the main features clearer and more fully reported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows a broadly sensible order, moving from an introduction to burglary, car crime, violent crime and a final comparison. Linking phrases such as “Moving on to” and “In comparison” help signal these shifts. However, the progression is not consistently clear because several sentences combine multiple comparisons without stating the figures or the relationship precisely. The final sentence repeats the general point about perceived decreases and actual stability, while the earlier discussion already covers it. Some references, such as “both graphs,” are also unclear. Organise the response into a brief overview followed by grouped comparisons, and use explicit labels such as “perceived likelihood” and “actual likelihood” to make connections easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary for describing change, including “collapsed,” “moderate expansion,” “stayed the same” and “minimal raise.” This shows an effort to avoid repeating one verb, and the reader can generally identify the intended comparisons. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for chart description: “collapsed” overstates the fall in car-crime perception, “expansion” is an awkward choice for a percentage increase, and “stadiness” is not the appropriate form. There are also spelling errors such as “Bruglary” and “occured.” Use precise, conventional terms for small movements and check spelling; this will make the comparisons more reliable and easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “whereas” and “in addition to that.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships difficult to follow. For example, “Bruglary had went down” uses an incorrect verb form, while “Moving on to car crime which was the highest noted crime among all three have collapsed” has an unclear subject–verb structure. The opening sentence is also awkwardly constructed, and several long sentences join ideas without clear punctuation. Practise forming direct subject–verb sentences and checking tense and agreement, for example: “Perceived burglary fell, whereas actual burglary rose slightly.” Clearer sentence boundaries will improve accuracy.

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