Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrates the possibility of the the danger and the likelihood of actually become a victim of criminal activity.

The chart shows likelihood of being a victim of crime by category which is burglary, car crime, and violent crime from the year 2009 to 2011. Where, perceived dander is highest and actual danger is lowest among all three years.

Overall, the percentage of perceived and danger is almost or exactly the same in the year 2009/10 and 2010/11 for the burglary and violent crimes which just over 15% for perceived and close 13% for actual danger

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s topic and name all three crime categories, and you attempt an overview by contrasting perceived and actual risk. However, the response is substantially incomplete: it contains 89 words, below the required 150, and reports very little of the chart’s data. The claim that perceived figures are “almost or exactly the same” across the two periods is inaccurate: they fall from about 15.5% to 13% for burglary and from 21% to 17% for car crime, while violent crime changes only slightly. You also describe actual danger as “close 13%,” although actual figures are only about 2–4.5%. Include the main comparisons and accurate figures for each crime type.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, a description of the categories and period, and an attempted overview. This gives the reader some sense of the topic, and “Overall” signals a summary. However, the ideas do not develop into a clear, complete account of the chart, and the final paragraph ends abruptly without covering the key comparisons. The sentence beginning “Where, perceived dander…” is not properly connected to the preceding sentence, while the overview combines unclear comparisons in one long sentence. Organise the response into a clear introduction, overview, and detail paragraphs, and use linking words to show contrasts between perceived and actual figures and between the two periods.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “burglary,” “car crime,” “violent crime,” “perceived,” and “likelihood,” so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the range is narrow and some word choices or combinations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the description difficult to interpret. “Possibility of the the danger” is awkward and repetitive, and “perceived dander” appears to be a misspelling that obscures the intended meaning. “Actual danger” is also less precise than describing the actual likelihood or rate of victimisation. Use standard chart language consistently, such as “percentage,” “proportion,” “rose,” and “fell,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the opening sentence communicates the general subject despite its errors. However, grammatical control is inconsistent. The phrase “the likelihood of actually become a victim” needs a gerund or infinitive form, and “Where, perceived…” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. In the overview, “which just over 15%” lacks a verb, while “close 13%” is missing a necessary preposition and does not form a clear comparison. There are also article and punctuation problems, including the repeated “the” in the opening. Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check verb forms and sentence boundaries.

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