Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart compares the proportion of preceived and actual chances to become a victim of stated dangers between 2009 and 2011.

Overall, the fear of crime happening exceeds far more than the actual likelihood over the period of time, with percision of car crimes taking lead followed by voilent crimes and burglary, respectively. Car crimes also took lead in likelihood of being a victim of a crime while burglary and voilet crime figures remained almost similar.

In between 2009 and 2011,15% and just below 15% people precived that they can become the victim of burglary and violent crimes but only below 5% people actually became victim.

In contrast, large number of people, just above 20% beleived that they will become victim of crime crimes in 2009/10, and this figure fell to just above 15% in 2010/11, but the actual number of people who became victim of this crime, falls just below 5%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s central contrast: perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation, and car crime has the highest figures. You also report the broad decline in perceived car-crime risk from 2009/10 to 2010/11. However, some features are only partly covered or unclear. The overview says burglary and violent-crime figures were “almost similar” without distinguishing perceived from actual figures, and the statement that actual victims “only below 5%” does not compare the small increases across the three categories. Include the four series explicitly and give a clearer overview of the main changes: perceived risk fell for all three crimes, while actual rates rose slightly or stayed similar.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the crime categories. Linking phrases such as “Overall” and “In contrast” help signal the purpose of each section. However, progression is not always clear because the discussion shifts between perceived and actual figures without consistently naming the series or year. For example, “In between 2009 and 2011” introduces burglary and violent crime, but the sentence does not specify which year the figures refer to. The overview also combines several comparisons in one long sentence. Organise the details by year or by perceived versus actual risk, and use clear references such as “the perceived figure” to make comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “likelihood,” “figure,” and “fell,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, the range and control are limited by repeated or imprecise expressions such as “become a victim” and “crime happening.” Several spelling errors—“preceived,” “percived,” “voilent,” “voilet,” and “beleived”—are noticeable, while “crime crimes” appears to be an accidental repetition. Some collocations are also unnatural: “fear of crime happening exceeds far more than” and “taking lead” do not express the comparisons clearly. Use precise terms such as “perceived risk,” “actual victimisation,” and “was highest,” and check spelling and collocation carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “In contrast” and a clause describing how the car-crime figure changed. The main meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors reduce clarity. For example, “the fear of crime happening exceeds far more than the actual likelihood” has an unclear comparison structure, and “15% and just below 15% people” is missing a grammatical link such as “of people believed.” In “the actual number of people who became victim of this crime, falls,” the article and verb form are problematic, and the comma interrupts the clause. Aim for complete, direct comparisons and check articles, agreement, and punctuation in longer sentences.

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