Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph compares chance that someone will experience a crime committed against them.crime and preceived danger.

Overall, graph shows three major sector of crime, it includes burgalry,car crime ,voilent crime althgh some sector has less crime rate as compared to others and vica versa.

Initially, burglary and voilent crime perceived 2010-11 was approximately 13% both are equal. likewise burglary and violent crime was same in perceived 2009-10 via 15%, infact car crime perceived 2009-10 was the highest of all its 22%. on the other hand burglary actual 2009-10 was the lowest of all around 3%.

subsequently, car crime in actual 2009-10 was 4% moreover the perceived 2009-10 was 13%. on the other hand car crime actual 2009-10 is slight low as compared to car crime . meanwhile voilent crime and burglary perceived 2010-11 were equal.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s three crime categories and make a relevant general comparison, noting that perceived risk is higher than actual crime and that car crime is perceived as the greatest danger. However, the response addresses the task only partially: it gives no clear, accurate overview of the main pattern across both years, and several figures or comparisons are missing or incorrect. For example, you describe actual burglary in 2009/10 as about 3%, whereas it is approximately 2%, and you call perceived car crime in 2009/10 22%, rather than about 21%. The final comparison is also unclear and repeats earlier information. The response is 14 words below the required minimum. To improve, summarise the large gap between perceived and actual likelihood, report the main year-to-year changes, and select accurate supporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response with an opening, an overview, and two body sections, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Initially,” and “subsequently” show an effort to guide the reader. However, the progression is difficult to follow because comparisons shift between crime types and years without a consistent structure. The second body paragraph repeats the 2009/10 car-crime comparison and then ends with a point already made about perceived burglary and violent crime. Some links, including “on the other hand” and “moreover,” do not clearly express the relationship between the ideas that follow them. Group the information by year or by perceived versus actual likelihood, and use each paragraph to develop a distinct comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “approximately,” and “highest,” so the reader can recognise the topic and some comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, such as “chance that someone will experience a crime committed against them” and “three major sector of crime.” There are also repeated terms and noticeable spelling errors, including “preceived,” “burgalry,” and “voilent.” Use concise, accurate phrases such as “perceived likelihood of victimisation” and “crime categories,” and check spelling carefully. More precise language for trends and comparisons would help you describe the chart without relying on repeated or awkward expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and some basic comparisons are understandable, for example, “car crime … was the highest of all.” However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation occur frequently enough to make parts difficult to interpret. The opening contains a run-on and repeated punctuation, while “Overall, graph shows three major sector” lacks an article and has incorrect agreement. In “burglary and violent crime perceived 2010-11 was approximately 13%,” the sentence structure does not clearly show what the figures refer to. Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, maintain consistent past-tense reporting, and separate clauses with appropriate punctuation. A simple, accurate comparison structure is preferable to a longer sentence that becomes unclear.

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