Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrate the percentage of estimated and actual likelihood of becoming a victim of three types namely; burglary, car crime and violent crime in 2009/10 and 2010/11.

Overall, the perceived of becoming a victim was considerably higher than the actual risk for all three types of crime. Car crime was considered the most likely, while burglary had the lowest actual rate in both years.

In 2009/10, car crime had the highest considered risk, at approximately 21%, followed by both burglary and violent crime at around 15%. However the actual figure were much lower, while the rate for burglary and violent crime were approximately at 3% and 2% respectively.

In 2010/2011, estimated for car crime fell around 17%, while burglary and violent both were estimated at approximately 13%.

The actual figure change only slightly. Car crime decreased to about 4% whares violent crime and burglary were estimated unchanged at 3% each.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation across all three crimes, and car crime has the highest perceived figure. The overview also notes burglary’s low actual rate, which is a relevant comparison. Most figures are broadly aligned with the chart, but there are some inaccuracies: in 2009/10 actual burglary was about 2% and violent crime about 3%, whereas these are reversed in your account. In the final paragraph, actual car crime remained around 4.5%, rather than decreasing to 4%, and the other actual rates rose slightly rather than staying unchanged. The response covers the key features, but more precise reporting of these changes and a fuller comparison of actual rates would strengthen it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two periods. This makes the main comparisons easy to follow, and transitions such as “Overall,” “However,” and “In 2010/2011” help signal the movement between points. The organisation is coherent, though the comparison within each year could be developed more systematically—for example, grouping perceived figures together and then comparing all three actual figures. Some links are also slightly awkward, particularly “while the rate for burglary and violent crime,” where the relationship between the figures is not immediately clear. More consistent sequencing and clearer references would make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of task-related vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual likelihood,” “estimated,” “risk,” and “approximately.” These choices allow you to describe the chart and distinguish belief from recorded crime. However, some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “the perceived of becoming a victim,” “highest considered risk,” and “the actual figure change only slightly.” There is also a spelling error in “whares.” Repeating “figure” and “estimated” limits flexibility, and “estimated” is not always the clearest term for perceived likelihood. Aim for more natural collocations such as “perceived likelihood,” “recorded rate,” and “remained broadly stable,” while checking spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including comparisons and clauses introduced by “while” and “however,” and your meaning is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, however. The opening needs subject–verb agreement (“The bar chart illustrates”), and “namely;” is not correctly punctuated. There are further agreement and tense problems in “the actual figure were” and “the rate … were,” while “the actual figure change” should use a past-tense verb. Articles and sentence construction also need attention in “In 2010/2011, estimated for car crime fell.” These errors do not usually prevent understanding, but they reduce accuracy. Proofread for agreement and past-tense consistency, and build more reliable complex sentences.

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