Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph illustrates the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Overall, it is clear that the perceived danger with the actual likelihood of becoming a victim of three types of crime: burglary, car crime, and violent crime in 2009 and 2010.

The highest figure was recorded 22% in 2009. In comparison burglary and violent crime recorded lower percentages than car crime.the actual likelihood of being a victim of crime differed across the three stages while the percieved danger remains same in both catogaries violent and burglary.

As we can see in 2009 and 2010 actual likelihood remains same in car crime while percieved danger in bulgary crime at lower

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s topic and mention the three crime types, but the response does not provide a clear, accurate summary of the main comparisons. The statement that the highest figure was 22% in 2009 is close to the perceived car-crime value, but the chart shows approximately 21%; more importantly, the overview that perceived danger “remains same” for burglary and violent crime overlooks their changes between years. Actual likelihoods are also not compared clearly with perceived figures, despite their large gap. The response is substantially under the required 150 words (94 words, with 20 prompt words excluded), so several key features are left undeveloped. Add a concise overview and support it with accurate comparisons across both years and all crime types.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview-like paragraph and a final comparison. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview sentence is incomplete in meaning (“it is clear that the perceived danger with the actual likelihood…”), and the next paragraph shifts abruptly between perceived and actual figures. The final sentence also ends with an unfinished comparison, “at lower,” leaving the reader unsure what is lower than what. Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “In comparison,” and “As we can see” provide some connection, but they do not establish a clear sequence of key features. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and detailed comparisons, and connect each comparison explicitly to its crime type and year.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “perceived danger,” “actual likelihood,” “recorded,” and “percentages,” which helps identify the subject of the chart. However, the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors reduce clarity: “percieved,” “catogaries,” and “bulgary” are inaccurate, while “stages” does not describe the crime types or years. The phrase “remains same” is also not a natural way to describe the figures. Aim for precise chart language and check spelling carefully. Useful alternatives include “crime categories” for “stages,” “remained unchanged” for “remains same,” and “was lower” for the incomplete phrase “at lower.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response includes a few simple sentence forms and attempts a longer overview, but grammatical control is inconsistent. The sentence beginning “Overall, it is clear that…” has no complete main idea after “that,” so its structure is difficult to interpret. In “the perceived danger with the actual likelihood,” the relationship between the two measures is not expressed grammatically. The phrase “the perceived danger remains same” is missing an article, and the final sentence is incomplete after “at lower.” Punctuation also needs attention: there is no space after the full stop in “car crime.the,” and spacing around the opening of the overview is uneven. Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and proofread sentence endings and punctuation.

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