Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

THE BAR GRAPH ILLUSTARTES ABOUT PERCEIVED DANGER AND ACTUAL LIKELIHOOD OF BEING A VICTIM OF CRIME. THE BAR GRAPH HAS DIFFERENT TYPES OF BAR IN THE FIGURE. THERE ARE VARIOUS TYPES OF CRIMES SHOWN IN FIGURE.

OVERALL, IT CAN SEEN THAT CAR CRIME IS ONE OF HIGHEST CRIME IN THE PICTURE. WHERE VIOLENT AND BURGLARY CRIME ARE THE SECOND LEAST CRIME IN THE FIGURE. THE FIGURE SHOWS VARIOUS DATE STARTING FROM 2009 TO 2011.

IN THE YEAR 2010, IT IS SEEN THAT ALMOST EVERY CRIME WAS AL MOST AT THE SAME LEVEL. BUTCAR CRIME HAS NOTED THE HIGHEST CRIME AT PERCEIVED IN 2009 TILL 2010. WHERE IN 2009 AND 2010 THE CRIME RATE WAS LEAST. THE BURGLARY CRIME HAS NOTED THE SECOND HIGHEST CRIME RATES IN THE BAR GRAPH.

ALTHOUGH IT WAS SECOND WHERE VIOLENT CRIME RATE HAS ALSO RISEN UP IN 2010. CAR CRIME WAS ALMOST WAS A TREND FOR THEIVES. THE LEAST CRIME WAS THERE IN 2010 IN BURGLARY CRIME. WHEREAS, THE CAR CRIME HAS OVERTAKEN BOTH THE CRIME. THE OVERALL BAR SHOWS IN PERCENTAGES.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the chart’s general subject and attempts an overview, especially by noting that car crime has the highest perceived figure. However, the main comparisons are often inaccurate or unclear: the chart shows perceived figures are much higher than actual figures in every category, but this central feature is not reported. The claim that burglary is the “second highest” is misleading, since violent crime is slightly higher than burglary in 2010/11, while both are far below car crime in perceived likelihood. The statement that crime rates were “least” in 2009 is also unsupported; actual burglary is lowest in both years. To improve, report the perceived-versus-actual contrast and describe the modest changes between the two periods accurately, using selected figures as evidence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to separate an introduction, overview and further details, and the response uses basic linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Although” and “Whereas.” However, the ideas do not progress in a clear sequence: the discussion moves between crime types, years and perceived rates without establishing a consistent comparison. Several sentences are fragments or leave the relationship between ideas unclear, for example, “Where violent and burglary crime are the second least crime” and “Whereas, the car crime has overtaken both the crime.” Repetition of “the figure” and “crime” also makes the organisation feel mechanical. A clearer structure would give an overview first, then compare perceived and actual figures, followed by changes from 2009/10 to 2010/11.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “perceived,” “actual likelihood,” “violent crime” and “percentages,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several choices are imprecise for describing a chart. Phrases such as “highest crime,” “second least crime” and “a trend for theives” do not clearly express whether the writer means perceived risk, actual victimisation or a percentage. There are also spelling errors, including “ILLUSTARTES” and “theives.” More precise chart language would help distinguish the data, for example, “perceived risk was highest for car crime” and “the actual rate remained comparatively low.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts simple statements and some longer clauses, but control is uneven, and errors often make comparisons difficult to follow. Examples include “it can seen” instead of “it can be seen,” “Car crime has noted” instead of “Car crime recorded,” and “violent crime rate has also risen up,” where the verb pattern is faulty. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also problematic: “Overall, it can seen that car crime is one of highest crime in the picture. Where violent and burglary crime…” leaves the second idea as a fragment. Articles, agreement and tense use need attention as well. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent past-tense forms when describing the chart’s periods.

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