Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given table shows perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime. This table shows percentage of perceived and actual crime from 2009 to 2011.

According to the given table in 2009/10, the percentage of perceived bulglary crimes is about 16% but the actual ratio is about 2.5%. Moreover, the perceived car crime is about 21% while actual likelihood is around 4.5% and percentage 0f voilent crime is 20% whereas, actual ratio is 3%.

The given table also shows the perceived and actual crime ratio in 2010/11. According to it, the perceived bulglary crime is 13% and the actual likelihood is 3%. On other hand, the ratio of estimated car crine is round about 17% and the actual ratio is 4%. The percentage of perceived voilent crime is 13.5% whereas actual likelihood is 3%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s topic and report several relevant comparisons, including the much higher perceived than actual likelihood for car crime in both periods. However, the response has no clear overview of the main patterns, and some figures are inaccurate: for example, perceived violent crime in 2009/10 is about 15.5%, not 20%, while actual burglary in 2010/11 is about 2.5%, not 3%. The account is also incomplete and does not explain the overall changes between periods. In addition, the response is 126 words, below the required 150 words; the 11 words copied from the prompt are excluded. Add a concise overview and develop the key comparisons with accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure: an introduction followed by separate paragraphs for 2009/10 and 2010/11. This gives the reader a simple way to follow the time periods, and linking phrases such as “Moreover” and “whereas” show attempts to connect comparisons. However, there is no distinct overview, so the information does not progress from the main trends to supporting details. Repeated openings such as “The given table shows” and “According to it” make the organisation mechanical, while some comparisons are crowded into long sentences. Grouping the main overall pattern first, then comparing the crime types across both years, would create clearer progression and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual likelihood,” “percentage,” and “crime,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or repetitive. “Actual crime ratio” is not a natural way to describe the chart’s figures; “actual likelihood” or “actual victimisation rate” would be clearer. There are also spelling errors in “bulglary,” “voilent,” and “crine,” which reduce accuracy, and “table” is used although the visual is a bar chart. Aim for precise chart language and vary reporting verbs and comparison phrases. Check spelling carefully, especially for the crime categories.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You produce several understandable sentences and attempt to combine comparisons using “while” and “whereas,” as in the sentence about car crime. This shows some ability to use more than simple sentence patterns. However, sentence structures are repetitive, and punctuation is sometimes faulty: “20% whereas, actual ratio is 3%” places a comma incorrectly after the linking word. The opening phrase “This table shows percentage” also needs an article or plural form, such as “the percentages.” Some sentences pack several figures into one structure, making them harder to follow. Use a wider mix of accurate sentence forms, and check articles, punctuation, and the grammatical links between clauses.

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