Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart beneath provide the perceived denger and excart likelihood of being a victm of crime.

Overall, perceived had the higher score while actual recorded the lower point.

first of all, in Burglary, perceived in2009/10 showed about 15 %, follow by perceived in 2010/11 with a mark of approximately 13%. while actual rose about 3 % which is quadripled for both years.

with regards to csr crime, percieved has rise to above 20%and followed by 18 increasment by the next year. wihch is the highest, while actualalso gradually rose to below 5% .

next, violent crime much up likeburglary which grow by 15% for both and actual almost 3% comparativelyfor both years

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s central contrast: perceived likelihood is much higher than actual likelihood, and you discuss all three crime types. You also note that car crime has the highest perceived figures. However, the report is incomplete and some details are inaccurate: for example, perceived car crime falls from about 21% to 17%, rather than rising to “above 20%” and then 18%; actual burglary is around 2–2.5%, not about 3% in both years. The overview is very general, and the response is 113 words, below the required 150, so key comparisons are not sufficiently developed. Include a clearer overview and accurately compare the two years for each series.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: an opening statement, a brief overview, and then comments on burglary, car crime and violent crime. Signposts such as “first of all,” “with regards to,” and “next” help the reader follow the categories. However, progression is limited, and the comparisons within each category are sometimes difficult to interpret. For instance, “actual rose about 3% which is quadripled for both years” does not clearly explain which year or figure is being compared. Several ideas run together, and punctuation and spacing make the links less clear. Use separate, complete sentences and group the perceived figures together before comparing actual figures, with accurate linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “approximately,” and “highest,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make the report harder to read: “denger,” “excart,” “victm,” “percieved,” and “increasment.” Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “higher score,” “lower point,” and “much up.” Choose precise chart language such as “percentage,” “figure,” “rose,” “fell,” and “remained stable.” Check spelling carefully and avoid using “increase” where the data show a decrease, as with perceived car crime from 2009/10 to 2010/11.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer structures, including “while actual recorded the lower point” and “which is the highest,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns and contain frequent grammatical problems. For example, “The bar chart beneath provide” has subject–verb disagreement, while “perceived in2009/10 showed” lacks a clear grammatical construction and spacing. The sentence beginning “with regards to csr crime” combines several clauses without clear punctuation, and “actual also gradually rose” is missing a determiner or clearer subject reference. These errors sometimes obscure the comparisons. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, consistent past-tense reporting, and accurate articles and punctuation; then add a few controlled comparison clauses.

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