Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this graph they show three types of crime.first is bulglary in which perceived victim in 2009/10 are 15.5% and the actual are 2.4%. In 2010/11 the perceived victims are 13% and the actual are 2.8%. The other type is car crime in which the data shows that in 2009/10 the perceived were 21% but the actual were 4.5%. In 2010/11 the perceived victims are 17% and the actual are 4.5%. The last crime which shows in the data is violent crime in which the data shows that in 2009/10 the perceived were 15% but the actual were 3%. In 2010/11 the perceived victims are 17% and the actual were also 3%. And thats all I briefly descripe the data shows in the graph.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify all three crime types and report figures for both years, so the response is relevant to the chart. However, it mainly lists data rather than summarising the main features: there is no clear overview noting that perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation, or that car crime is highest in both measures. Some figures are inaccurate: burglary actual rates are about 2% and 2.5%, not 2.4% and 2.8%; violent crime perception is about 15.5% and 13.5%, not 15% and 17%. The response also does not meet the 150-word minimum. Add an overview, select the most important comparisons, and check each figure against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The information follows a sensible order, moving from burglary to car crime and then violent crime, and phrases such as “In 2010/11” help signal changes between years. However, the response is presented as one continuous paragraph and relies heavily on the repeated pattern “the data shows” and “the perceived victims are.” This makes the progression feel like a list rather than a developed summary. The closing sentence, “And thats all I briefly descripe,” does not add a useful concluding comparison. Group the information into an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph comparing the figures, and use linking language to highlight similarities and differences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is sufficient to identify the chart’s subject and distinguish “perceived” from “actual” figures, which helps communicate the basic information. However, the range is narrow and several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, including “perceived victim,” “the perceived were,” and “the data shows.” There are also spelling errors in “bulglary,” “descripe,” and “thats.” These issues make the writing less precise and less suitable for a formal chart summary. Use terms such as “perceived likelihood,” “actual rate,” and “percentage” consistently, and choose verbs such as “stood at” or “fell to” to describe the figures and changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use mostly simple sentence patterns, with some attempts to connect clauses using “in which” and “but.” The basic meaning is generally understandable, but the limited range does not allow you to compare the data smoothly. There are recurring grammatical and punctuation problems, such as the missing space after “crime.”, the sentence beginning “first is,” and inconsistent use of “are” and “were” when describing figures. The final sentence also begins with “And,” creating an awkward fragment-like ending. Practise writing complete sentences with accurate articles and consistent past-tense reporting, and combine related figures using controlled comparative structures.

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