Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table illustrates the information about People's perceived likelihood of being victims of crime compared with the actual risk, by crime category.

Overall, the type of car crime recorded the highest crime with the perceived which is above to 20 and the actual crime is near to below 5, while the Bulglary and the Violent crime were equal in term of perceived

which is exactly 15 in numbers,But in the term of actual crime they both were different from each other in the comparison of number like the in Burglary the actual crime is near about 3, however in term of violent crime the actual crime rose slightly to roughly around 4.

In term of perceived 2010/11, the number of this in car crime is the highest with the number of 15+ and in Burglary, it fell down and reach at below 15.Then, at last Violent Crime it rise slightly with some numbers as compared to others .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s central contrast: perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation, and car crime is generally the highest category. You also compare burglary and violent crime in the first period. However, the overview is unclear and contains inaccurate details: burglary and violent crime are not equal in perceived risk in 2009/10 (about 15.5% each, close but not exactly 15%), and actual burglary is about 2%, not near 3%. More importantly, the response gives only vague descriptions of 2010/11 and omits the actual figures and comparisons for that year. Report the overall decline in perceived risk across categories, while actual rates rise slightly or remain stable, and support this with accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, an overview, and a final paragraph on 2010/11. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is limited: the overview contains several details that would be clearer in a data paragraph, while the final paragraph covers only perceived figures and leaves the actual series unreported. Linking expressions such as “while,” “however,” and “Then, at last” are used, but some connections are awkward or unclear, and the long overview sentence is difficult to follow. Group the information by year or by perceived versus actual risk, and use shorter sentences with clear comparisons to make the sequence easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “perceived likelihood,” “actual risk,” “crime category,” and “rose slightly,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “the type of car crime recorded the highest crime” does not clearly describe the highest perceived percentage, and “the number of this in car crime” is unnatural. “Fell down and reach at below 15” is also imprecise. Use terms such as “percentage,” “rate,” “was highest,” “declined to,” and “remained broadly stable,” ensuring that each phrase describes the data accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and use comparison structures, including “while” and “however,” but these are often not controlled successfully. Errors in sentence construction, agreement, verb forms, articles, and punctuation occur frequently enough to make parts of the response hard to follow. For instance, “the type of car crime recorded the highest crime with the perceived which is above to 20” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “it rise slightly” has an incorrect verb form. The overview sentence also runs on and contains unclear clauses. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement, past-tense forms, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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