Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrates the perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Overall, it is evident that the three kinds of crime are saw in chart for instance; burglay, car crime, and violent crime . The higher crime rate is for the Car. Moreover the least rate is saw for the burglary.

In contrast, the percentage for the perceived 2009/10 car crime is higher than the other round about 21 percent .However perceived 2010/11 is 16 percent, whereas acuual 2009/10 or actual 2010/11 are stood on the same percent which is about 4. The violent crime is second higher percent which stood on 15.5 for perceived 2009/10 additionally 2010/11 is saw 14 percent.There are more two given in graph for violent crime actual one and both of them are round about 3 percent. In terms third one is burglary crime which lower in percent as comparsion to other. The perceived 2009/10 is 16 percent futrthermore, perceived 2010/11 is stood on 13 percent however, other two are almost consta

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and make relevant comparisons, including that perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation and that car crime has the highest perceived figure. Several reported values are broadly accurate: perceived car crime is about 21% in 2009/10 and perceived burglary is about 13% in 2010/11. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: burglary is not consistently the least likely crime, since car crime has the lowest actual rate in neither year; rather, burglary has the lowest actual rate. The response also omits a clear summary of the overall year-to-year pattern and ends before completing the final comparison (“other two are almost consta…”). Develop a concise overview and report the actual figures more precisely to cover the key features fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an opening, an attempted overview, and a paragraph of comparisons, so there is some basic organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded into one paragraph and the comparisons shift abruptly between crime types and years. Linking expressions such as “In contrast,” “Moreover,” and “furthermore” are used, but some do not clearly express the relationship between the information that follows. The final sentence is incomplete, leaving the burglary comparison unfinished. Organise the details into a clearer sequence—for example, first summarise perceived risk, then compare actual rates—and use fewer, more precise linking phrases. This would make the relationships between figures easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “percentage,” and the crime categories, which helps communicate the topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “the three kinds of crime are saw in chart,” “the higher crime rate is for the Car,” and “stood on the same percent” are not natural ways to describe chart data. There are also spelling errors, including “burglay,” “acuual,” “comparsion,” and “futrthermore.” Use precise reporting language such as “accounted for,” “was approximately,” and “remained stable,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some complex sentences, using comparisons and clauses with “whereas” and “however,” but control is inconsistent and errors occur frequently enough to interrupt reading. Examples include “the three kinds of crime are saw,” “actual 2009/10 or actual 2010/11 are stood,” and “perceived 2010/11 is stood on 13 percent,” where verb forms and sentence construction are faulty. Punctuation also causes problems, such as the missing space after the full stop before “However” and the unfinished final sentence. Practise building accurate simple comparison sentences first, then combine them with clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, tense, and complete sentence boundaries before submitting.

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