Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given graph illustrate the perceived likelihood of being a victim of crime. this graph highlights 3 main features burglary, car crime, violent crime.

an overview reporting value rise up from 0 to 25 percentage. there is comparison time period is perceived, actual 2009/2010 to perceived, actual 2010/2011. it describe being a victim of crime percentage.

overall comparisons between 3 main features first high-rise car crime 0 to 22, in 2009 now its reduce 0 to16%. then shows burglary crime 0 to15% increase in 2009 now reduce 0 to13. more over violent crime grow up 0 to 16% now they reduced at 0 to 13%.

This is actual all information about victim of crime type. over government need to high check and balance on this cheap activates. every state need to provide security on these three main features type. this graph is very informative for security concerns and and population life securing prospective.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify all three crime categories and make a relevant attempt to compare the two periods, especially by noting that perceived figures fell. However, the account is only minimally informative because it does not distinguish perceived likelihood from actual victimisation, despite both being central to the chart. The figures “car crime 0 to 22” and “burglary … 0 to 15%” are not accurate descriptions: the chart shows perceived car crime at about 21% in 2009/10 and 17% in 2010/11, while perceived burglary is about 15.5% and 13%. Actual rates are much lower, around 2–4.5%. The overview is also unclear, and the advice about government security is not requested. Focus on accurate key comparisons and a concise chart-based overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening names the categories, a separate paragraph introduces an overview, and the next paragraph compares crime types. This gives the reader some sense of the topic. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview does not clearly state the main pattern, and the comparisons mix starting points, percentages and time periods—for example, “first high-rise car crime 0 to 22” followed by “in 2009 now its reduce 0 to16%.” Linking phrases such as “more over” and “This is actual all information” do not clarify the relationships. The final comments about government security interrupt the chart description. Use clear paragraphs for overview and data comparisons, and connect each figure explicitly to its series and year.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “perceived likelihood,” “actual,” “burglary,” “car crime” and “violent crime,” so the subject is recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or combinations make the meaning unclear. Phrases such as “value rise up,” “high-rise car crime,” “cheap activates” and “population life securing prospective” are not natural or precise in this context. “Features” is also repeated where “crime types” or “categories” would be clearer. Aim for standard chart language such as “percentage,” “rate,” “increased,” “declined” and “was higher than,” and avoid adding unrelated evaluative vocabulary. More accurate collocations would make your comparisons easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response contains short statements and attempts to connect ideas, but sentence structures are very limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes obscuring the intended comparison. For example, “The given graph illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “there is comparison time period is perceived” lacks a workable sentence structure. Tense and clause formation are also problematic in “in 2009 now its reduce” and “violent crime grow up … now they reduced.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including sentence starts such as “this graph” and “an overview.” Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use past-tense forms consistently when describing the chart’s periods. A few accurate simple sentences would be more effective than incomplete or overloaded ones.

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