Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar graph illustrates of being the preceived danger and real likelihood of a victim of crime namely,burglary,car crime violent crime.
overall it is clear that proprotion of car crime is reporting increased.Car crime experienced on highest number of actual residencyWhile .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response identifies the chart’s subject and names all three crime types, so it is at least relevant to the task. However, it does not provide a usable summary of the data: there are no figures or clear comparisons between perceived and actual likelihood, or between the two years. The claim that car crime “experienced on highest number of actual residency” is unclear and does not accurately describe the chart; car crime does have the highest actual figures, but these are far below perceived estimates. The overview that car crime is “reporting increased” is also unsupported, since perceived figures fall from 2009/10 to 2010/11 and actual figures change only slightly. The response is substantially below the required 150 words, leaving the task minimally addressed. Include a clear overview and selected accurate comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and then an overview signalled by “overall.” This gives the reader a minimal sense of sequence. However, the response ends after two incomplete, poorly connected statements, and the final “While” has no clause to complete it. The ideas do not progress into comparisons or supporting details, and the sentence “Car crime experienced on highest number of actual residencyWhile” is difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and key comparisons, and connect each point clearly—for example, contrast perceived figures with actual figures before comparing the years. At present, the limited organisation and unclear links prevent the information from being arranged coherently.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The response uses a few task-related terms, including “bar graph,” “perceived danger,” “likelihood,” and the crime categories, which shows some relevant vocabulary. However, the range is very limited, and several word choices or forms make the meaning unclear. “Preceived” is misspelled, “proprotion” is also misspelled, and “actual residency” does not express the idea of actual victimisation or likelihood. “Reporting increased” is an awkward phrase for describing a change in chart data. Use precise chart language such as “percentage,” “was perceived to be,” “actual rate,” “rose,” and “fell,” while checking spelling and collocations. The current errors strain the reader’s understanding of the few points attempted.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response attempts a simple opening statement and an overview, but grammatical control is weak and sentence structures are very limited. The opening, “The bar graph illustrates of being the preceived danger,” lacks a grammatical construction after “illustrates”; a clearer pattern would be “The bar graph compares perceived and actual likelihoods.” The phrase “Car crime experienced on highest number” has an incorrect verb pattern and is missing an article or suitable noun phrase. The final “While” leaves the sentence incomplete, and punctuation and spacing are inconsistent. These errors make parts of the message difficult to interpret. Practise complete subject–verb sentences and use straightforward comparison structures, such as “The perceived figure for car crime was higher than the actual figure.”
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