Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The presented bar graph demonstrates the potential risk and prospective of being a individual of crime.

Overall,it can be noticed that the perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of car crime in both 2009/10 and 2010/11 is the highest.While the burglary and violent crime was at the same point in both 2009/10 and 2010/11 perceived and actual crimes.

To conclude that,the perceived thread and odd of burglary crime in 2009/10 was at 15 and around 2 percents respectively.While the crime in 2010/11 was decline and reached at nearly 12.5 and 2.5 percents.

The ratio of perceived car crime in 2009/10 was at highest point at above the 21 percent and the actual crime was around 4 percent.On the other hand,the percentage in 2010/11 the perceived and actual car crime reduces and reached at nearly 16.5 and 3.5 percents.

The value of violent crime remained same as burglary crime.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad pattern that car crime has the highest perceived and actual figures, and you compare both years for burglary and car crime. However, the overview is incomplete: it does not clearly state that perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation for every crime type, and the claim that burglary and violent crime were “at the same point” is not accurate across the figures. Some values are also misreported: perceived burglary in 2010/11 is about 13%, not 12.5%, and actual car crime remains around 4.5%, rather than falling to 3.5%. Violent crime receives almost no detail. The response is 141 words, nine short of the 150-word minimum, which limits the coverage of the data. Develop the overview and include accurate comparisons across all three categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, beginning with an introduction and overview before moving to details about burglary and car crime. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is limited: violent crime is left until the final sentence, where it is not compared or supported with figures, and the paragraphing does not clearly separate the overview from the detailed comparisons. Linking expressions such as “To conclude that” and repeated uses of “While” and “On the other hand” are awkward or do not show the intended relationship clearly. Group the information consistently—for example, compare perceived with actual figures across each year—and use straightforward transitions such as “By contrast” or “In both years” to make the comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of terms related to the chart, including “perceived,” “actual,” “percentage,” and “ratio,” and the reader can generally recognise the topic. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or confusing, such as “prospective of being a individual,” “perceived thread and odd,” and “the crime … was decline.” “To conclude” is also unsuitable for introducing a data detail. These errors sometimes make it difficult to understand exactly what is being measured. Aim for precise, repeated chart language rather than using near-synonyms that change the meaning: describe the “perceived likelihood” and “actual rate,” and say that a figure “fell to” a value. Check spelling and word forms, especially “threat,” “odds,” and “individual.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes some attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example, “While the burglary and violent crime was at the same point…,” but these structures are often faulty. Errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries occur throughout: “a individual,” “the burglary and violent crime was,” and “the crime … was decline” are examples. Several clauses are joined with full stops or commas in ways that make the sentence structure unclear, and spaces after punctuation are often missing. Most sentences rely on simple patterns, so the range is limited as well as inaccurate. Practise forming clear comparison sentences with a subject and correctly inflected verb, such as “Perceived burglary fell, while the actual figure rose slightly,” and proofread articles, plurals, and punctuation.

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