Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrate the perceived danger and actual likehood of being a victim of crime represented by percentage and crime type such as Burglary, car crime and violent crime.

Overall, Car crime showed high proportion of perceived and actual, while Burglary and Violent crime were less dengerous.

Looking at the details, Burglary marked roughly 2.5% in actual 2009/10 and actual 2010/11, and 13% in perceived 2010/11, and 15% in perceived 2009/10 the same in violent crime.

Were car crime shows slight increased in all victim, 4% in actual 2009/10 and 210/11 and 12% in perceived 210/11 and finaly the most one is perceived 2009/10 reached pick of 21%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and make a relevant overview by noting that car crime has the highest perceived figures. You also include several approximate values, such as 21% for perceived car crime in 2009/10 and 13% for perceived burglary in 2010/11. However, the overview is incomplete and partly inaccurate: actual car crime is not uniquely high, and burglary and violent crime are not simply “less dangerous” across every measure. Some figures are omitted or misreported, including the 2010/11 perceived car-crime figure (about 17%, not 12%), and the actual figures are not consistently compared. The response also falls short of the required 150 words, limiting the detail and coverage. Add a clearer overview and compare both years across all three crime types.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, an overview, and then details about burglary and car crime. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is limited because the final paragraph moves between categories and years without a consistent comparison pattern, and violent crime receives little separate treatment. Linking is also weak: “Were car crime shows” does not clearly connect to the preceding information, while “and finaly” joins details without showing their relationship. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs and organise the details by crime type or by perceived versus actual likelihood. Clear transitions such as “By contrast” and “In both years” would make comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “percentage,” and “reached,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts difficult to interpret. “High proportion of perceived and actual” is not a natural way to describe the figures, and “less dengerous” confuses the chart’s likelihood measure with danger. “Finaly,” “likehood,” and “pick” also contain spelling errors, while “all victim” is unclear. Aim for precise reporting language such as “accounted for,” “was estimated at,” and “the highest perceived likelihood.” Check spelling and use the same terms consistently for perceived and actual figures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of sentence forms, including an overview and a longer sentence beginning “Looking at the details,” but control is inconsistent. The opening has subject–verb disagreement (“The bar chart illustrate”), and the overview lacks a clear grammatical structure (“Car crime showed high proportion of perceived and actual”). The final sentence, “Were car crime shows…,” is also difficult to parse, with faulty clause structure and tense. Articles and sentence boundaries are often missing or unclear, and the response relies heavily on fragments or loosely joined clauses. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then use simple comparison structures accurately—for example, “The perceived figure for car crime fell from about 21% to 17%.”

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