Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates the perceived and actual likelihood of getting victimized for burglary, car and violent crime in the years 2009-10 and 2010-11. The data is presented in percentages.

Overall, there is a large disconnect between the perceived and the actual likelihood in both the years for the mentioned type of crimes. Although, the perceived likelihood has decreased over the years, the actual danger of a crime has increased in the case of burglary and violent crimes.

But a different trend is followed for car crimes, where the actual likelihood has slightly decreased with its perceived counterpart from 4 percent in [redacted phone] to 3.5 percent in 2010-11.

The highest perceived danger can be seen for car crimes in 2009-10 which is above 20 percent.

This fell to 17 percent in the latter year. The actual danger for car crimes is also the highest in 2009-10. A similar amount of just above 15 percent can be seen for both burglary and violent crimes in the former year which decreased at the same pace to 13 percent for the latter year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s central contrast: perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation for all three crime types, and you note that perceived figures generally fall in 2010–11. The comparisons for car crime and the similar perceived levels for burglary and violent crime are relevant. However, the overview and details are not fully accurate or complete. You say actual car-crime likelihood fell from 4% to 3.5%, whereas it is about 4.5% in both years; the 3.5% figure relates to actual violent crime. You also claim actual risk increased for burglary and violent crime, which is correct, but the changes are not quantified. Include the actual figures for all categories and clarify the overall pattern to make the report more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph of supporting comparisons. The reader can follow the movement from general trends to individual crime types, and phrases such as “in the latter year” help signal time comparisons. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or unclear. The opening of the third paragraph, “But a different trend is followed,” is an abrupt transition, and “with its perceived counterpart” does not clearly identify which figures are being compared. The final paragraph focuses mainly on perceived values and leaves the actual figures underdeveloped. Use more precise links between each comparison and organise the details consistently by crime type or by perceived versus actual likelihood.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of task-related vocabulary, including “perceived likelihood,” “actual danger,” “disconnect,” and “decreased,” and the meaning is generally clear. There is also some variation in how you describe change, such as “fell” and “decreased.” At times, however, word choice or collocation is imprecise: “getting victimized” is less natural in this context than “being a victim,” while “the mentioned type of crimes” is awkward. “A similar amount” is also not the best expression for percentages, and “actual danger” can blur the distinction between risk and recorded likelihood. Aim for precise chart language such as “proportion,” “figure,” and “actual likelihood,” and avoid repeating “danger” when describing the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex forms, including a concessive clause beginning “Although” and a relative clause in “where the actual likelihood has slightly decreased.” Most sentences are understandable, and errors do not prevent the reader from following the main comparisons. Some grammatical and punctuation issues remain. “Although” is incorrectly followed by a full stop and then a separate clause; connect it to the main clause or remove it. “The data is presented” uses a singular verb with the plural-form noun “data” in formal academic usage, and “both the years” needs the article “both years.” The sentence beginning “But a different trend” is also a fragment-like transition when separated from the preceding overview. More consistent control of clause boundaries and agreement would strengthen accuracy.

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