Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrates the proportion of victim of crime by 3 different types of crime.

Overall, it is noticeable that perceived crime by the car was highest throughout the period, whereas the actual crime by the burglary accounted for the lowest percentage.

In [redacted phone], the perceived likelihood of being victim by a car accounted for the largest proportion, at about 22 percent while burglary and voilent crime represented the almost same percentages about 16 and 15 percent. In comparison, the actual victim of crime accounted for the lowest proportion, comprising about 4 percent by car, 3 percent voilet and 2 percent by burglary respectively,

Moreover, percieved accidents by car recorded 17 percent of crimes in [redacted phone], followed by 13 percent of voilet crime and burglary. By comparison, the actual crime presented by car accounted for 4 percent and 3 percent by voilet and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main contrast: perceived likelihood is much higher than actual victimisation, and car crime is generally the highest perceived category. You also include several relevant figures. However, the report is only partial: the final sentence breaks off after “3 percent by voilet and”, leaving the 2010/11 actual figures incomplete, and there is no clear comparison of changes between the two periods. The overview also says burglary was lowest for actual crime, but does not summarise the substantial gap between perceived and actual rates across all categories. The response is six words below the required minimum, which contributes to its limited coverage. Complete the final comparison and add a concise overview of the main trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic, useful structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the two periods. Connectors such as “Overall,” “In comparison,” and “Moreover” help signal relationships between points. However, progression is weakened by the incomplete final sentence, which leaves the account unfinished, and by the shift from 2009/10 to 2010/11 without fully completing the comparison. Some linking is also mechanical, with “by comparison” repeating the contrast already introduced. Organise the details consistently—for example, compare perceived and actual figures within each year—and ensure every sentence is complete. This would make the information easier to follow and the paragraphing more purposeful.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant terms, including “perceived likelihood,” “proportion,” and “accounted for,” so the reader can recognise the subject and intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or awkward expressions make the report less clear. “Perceived crime by the car” and “perceived accidents by car” do not accurately describe the likelihood of victimisation, while “actual victim of crime” is an awkward way to report a percentage. There are also repeated spelling errors, including “voilent,” “voilet,” and “percieved.” Use precise chart language such as “perceived risk of car crime” and “actual victimisation rate,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “whereas” and a comparison beginning “In comparison.” However, errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to interpret. In “while burglary and voilent crime represented the almost same percentages,” the clause lacks a clear verb structure and uses an unnecessary article. “The actual victim of crime accounted for the lowest proportion” also has an unclear subject, and the final sentence is unfinished. There are problems with articles, sentence construction, and punctuation, including a comma at the end of the 2009/10 paragraph. Practise complete, parallel comparisons, such as “Actual rates were about 2% for burglary and 4.5% for car crime.”

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