Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph compares the percentage of perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime by three types of crime from the year 2009 to 2011.

Overall, the perceived likelihood of crime in all crime categories stays the highest in comparison of actual crime committed. The perceived and actual crime percentage of car crime is the highest amongst all the three categories while burglary and violent crime stays more or less the same interms of risk.

Car crime in actual through 2009 - 2011 has seen a similar trend and stays at the same threshold of approximately 5% while the perceived risk has seen a downward trend from 22% to 18% respectively.

Meanwhile, in contrast, burglary has seen an opposite trend as it was lowest in actual around 2% during 2009 - 2010 when it was predicted to be the highest at 15% and was higher in actual at about 3% when it was assumed to be approximately 13% in 2010 to 2011.

Whereas, violent crime increased when it was projected to be lowest in 2010 - 2011 significantly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main contrast accurately: perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation across all three crime types, and car crime has the highest figures. You also include relevant comparisons between the two periods. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: perceived car crime falls from about 21% to 17%, not 22% to 18%, and burglary is not the highest perceived category in 2009/10; car crime is. The final point about violent crime is particularly unclear: its perceived figure falls from about 15.5% to 13.5%, while its actual figure rises slightly from 3% to 3.5%. A clearer overview and more precise reporting of these trends would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to comparisons of car crime, burglary and violent crime. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Meanwhile” and “Whereas” help signal relationships between points. However, progression is weakened when the burglary comparison is compressed into one long sentence, and the final sentence does not clearly explain what increased or what “it” refers to. The contrast marker “Whereas” also leaves the ending feeling incomplete. Organise the details into clearer comparisons—for example, perceived figures together and actual figures together—and use explicit references to the crime type and period. This would make the relationships between the data easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “perceived likelihood,” “actual,” “downward trend” and “approximately,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There are, however, several imprecise or unnatural choices. “Actual crime committed” does not accurately describe the chart’s actual likelihood of victimisation, while “predicted” and “assumed” suggest forecasting rather than reported perceptions. “Threshold” is also not a natural way to describe a percentage that remains stable. Spelling and spacing in “interms” should be corrected to “in terms.” Choose consistent terms such as “perceived risk” and “actual likelihood,” and use precise trend language such as “remained stable” or “declined.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while” and “when,” and most of the message can be understood. Some grammatical errors and awkward constructions remain. For example, “the perceived likelihood … stays the highest in comparison of actual crime committed” has an unclear comparison structure, and “burglary and violent crime stays” has a subject–verb agreement error. The sentence beginning “Meanwhile, in contrast” is difficult to parse because several clauses and time references are combined. The final sentence also lacks a clear grammatical relationship between its clauses. Use shorter, complete comparisons, check singular and plural agreement, and make sure each sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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