Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph illustrates how dangerous people feels crime is and how society is being affected by the crime.

Overall, the perceived and actual crime types in the period from 2009 to 2011 are Burglary, Car crime, Violent crime, Number of these crimes are increasing or decreasing.

The highest type of crime which can be done is Car crime and it goes upto 22% approximately which has done a negative impact on society, Meanwhile the lowest type of crime in actual attack is burglary around 3%.

In addition there are other type of crimes which are also escavating are crimes which include violency, fight and other things.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the chart’s broad subject and mentions car crime and burglary, but it does not adequately summarise the main features. The overview is unclear: “Number of these crimes are increasing or decreasing” does not state the actual pattern, and the claim that crime types are “increasing or decreasing” is not supported as a clear comparison. Car crime is indeed the highest perceived category, at about 21% in 2009/10 and 17% in 2010/11, but the response gives only one approximate figure and does not distinguish perceived from actual likelihood. It also mischaracterises the chart as showing crime’s impact on society and adds unsupported examples such as “fight.” The response is 106 words, below the required 150. To improve, report the large gap between perceived and actual rates and the general decline in perceived figures, while noting that actual rates rise slightly or remain similar.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an opening, an overview, and further details, so the reader can recognise a general progression. However, the overview sentence is difficult to follow: “Burglary, Car crime, Violent crime, Number of these crimes are increasing or decreasing” combines a list with an incomplete comparison. The final paragraph introduces additional crime examples without connecting them to the chart, and “In addition” does not establish a clear relationship with the preceding point. Use one paragraph for a concise overview and another to compare the two years and perceived versus actual figures. Clear links such as “By contrast” and “In both years” would help show the relationships between the data rather than simply adding loosely related statements.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “crime,” and the three crime categories, which makes the subject partly identifiable. However, several choices are inaccurate or unsuitable for describing a statistical chart. “Dangerous people feels crime is” is an awkward way to express perceived risk, while “negative impact on society” is not information shown by the graph. “Escavating” is misspelled and “violency” is not the appropriate noun; “violent crime” is the chart’s term. The phrase “type of crime which can be done” is also imprecise. Build a small set of accurate chart-description expressions, such as “the perceived likelihood,” “the actual rate,” and “accounted for approximately,” and use the chart’s category labels consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response contains some understandable simple sentence patterns, such as “The graph illustrates…” and “the lowest type of crime in actual attack is burglary.” There is also an attempt to use a longer sentence with “which,” although the structure is not controlled: “Number of these crimes are increasing or decreasing” lacks a clear grammatical subject and does not form a complete, accurate overview. In the opening, “people feels” has subject–verb disagreement, and “how society is being affected by the crime” uses an awkward article and tense construction. The final sentence also has an unclear clause structure. Practise writing short, complete comparisons first, checking subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries, then combine them with accurate connectors such as “while” or “whereas.”

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