Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph illustrate that the perceived danger and real likelihood of being murder of crime.
Overall,percieved and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.It can be seen in line graph the percentages of car crime is upward and other burglary and violent crime is remain the same.
In detail,the ratio of car crime in perceived in 2009 is 15.However, it was considered the highest and the lowest is actual 2010/10.the highest value is r
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response makes a limited attempt to describe the chart, but it does not provide a clear, accurate summary of its main features. It identifies car crime as having the highest perceived figures, yet the claim that its percentage is “upward” is incorrect: perceived car-crime risk falls from about 21% in 2009/10 to 17% in 2010/11. The statement that burglary and violent crime “remain the same” also misses their small changes. Actual likelihoods are not clearly compared, and “actual 2010/10” is not a chart category. The response is also far below the required 150 words, with 67 words submitted (83 short; nine prompt words were excluded). Include a clear overview and accurate comparisons across both years and both measures.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introductory statement, followed by an overview and a detail sentence. Linking expressions such as “Overall” and “In detail” show an awareness of how to structure a report. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview repeats the topic rather than summarising the main pattern, and the final sentence breaks off at “the highest value is r”. The relationship between the figures is also unclear in phrases such as “the ratio of car crime in perceived in 2009”. Use separate, complete sentences to compare perceived and actual figures, and organise the response into a short introduction, overview, and detail paragraphs.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “perceived”, “actual”, “percentages”, “highest” and “lowest”, so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “real likelihood of being murder of crime” and “the ratio of car crime in perceived”. “Upward” is also an unsuitable description of a trend that declines. These word-choice and collocation problems make parts of the report hard to understand, while the unfinished final phrase provides no usable detail. Aim for precise terms such as “perceived risk”, “actual likelihood” and “percentage”, and use trend verbs such as “fell” or “remained broadly stable” only when they match the data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts a few sentence forms, including an opening statement and a contrast introduced by “However”, but control is inconsistent. In “The graph illustrate”, the subject and verb do not agree; “the percentages of car crime is upward” also has faulty agreement and an incomplete grammatical construction. The sentence beginning “It can be seen in line graph” lacks an article, and “burglary and violent crime is remain” combines incompatible verb forms. Punctuation spacing is inconsistent, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise accurate simple comparisons first, then add a controlled range of clauses—for example, “Perceived risk fell, whereas actual likelihood changed little.”
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