Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph demonstrate the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime type burglary, car crime and violent crime.

Overall it is clear that perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime car accounted for the largest category while burglary was the smallest category.However other catagory of violent crime were also also flactuate over the period.

In 2009 perceived accounted had the largest category at 22% its figure drop in 2010 at 17%,followed by this actuall category was represented same in both years at 4%.However burglary in 2009 perceived approximately around 16% it figure decline 13% in 2010,actuall at 3% in 2009 it figure slightly rose at 3.5% in 2010.

in contrast,violent crime perceived and actuall likelihoof of being a v were seen at 15% in 2009 its figure fell at 13% in 2010.actual accounted at the 2.5% in 2009 and its level around at 3.5% in 2010

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the three crime types and make relevant comparisons between perceived and actual likelihood, including the broad pattern that perceived figures are much higher. You also report several approximate values. However, the overview is unclear: saying car crime was the “largest category” and burglary the “smallest” does not specify that this applies to both years and both measures, and the claim that violent crime “flactuate” is not a clear summary. Some figures are inaccurate: actual burglary was about 2% and 2.5%, not 3% in 2009; actual violent crime was about 3% and 3.5%, not 2.5% and 3.5%. The response is 132 words, below the 150-word minimum; the 22 words copied from the prompt are not counted. Add a clearer overview and check each figure against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs comparing the crime types. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression is not consistently clear, and several comparisons are crowded into long sentences. For example, the burglary sentence combines perceived and actual figures for both years without clear separation. Linking words such as “Overall,” “However,” and “in contrast” are attempted, but “However” is used where the relationship is not always a contrast, and the repeated “its figure” makes references difficult to follow. Use one paragraph for the overview and group the detailed comparisons systematically, with shorter sentences and clear references to each year and measure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual likelihood,” “decline,” and “rose,” which helps communicate the chart’s subject and changes. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. Phrases such as “accounted had the largest category,” “were seen at,” and “its level around at” are not natural ways to describe chart data. There are also spelling errors, including “catagory,” “flactuate,” and “likelihoof,” which reduce clarity. Aim for precise reporting verbs and comparison language, such as “stood at,” “fell to,” and “remained stable.” Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating “figure” when a clearer noun or pronoun is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the reader can generally identify the intended comparisons. However, control of sentence structure is inconsistent, particularly when several figures are joined together. For example, “its figure drop in 2010 at 17%,followed by this actuall category was represented same in both years” contains faulty verb forms and an unclear clause connection. Subject–verb agreement is also problematic in “The bar graph demonstrate,” while missing articles and punctuation affect readability throughout. Capitalisation at the start of the final paragraph is inconsistent, and commas are often missing after introductory phrases. Build accurate short sentences first, then combine related information using controlled clauses and check verb tense and agreement.

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