Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

The graph showing four type of data of year 2009 to 2011 that is-

Perceived 2009 to 2010 and actual of year 2009 to 2010.

Moreover,perceived and actual of year 2010 to 2011.

A increase in perceived car crimes in 2009 to 2010.It touches ratio of 21.

Perceived violent and burglary crimes of 2009 to 2010 are raised on second number.

Perceived crimes of violent and burglary are significant in year 2010 to 2011.

Perceived car crimes of year 2010 to 2011 showing the ratio of 17.

Actual car crimes are same in 2009 to 2011.

In burglary crimes there is a slight difference in ratio of year 2009/10 to 2010/11.

Actual ratio of violent crimes are also significant in years from 2009 to 2011.

Actual in 2009 to 2010 is less in burglary among all.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and report several relevant comparisons, including that perceived car-crime risk was highest in 2009/10 at about 21%, fell to 17% in 2010/11, and that actual car-crime figures were unchanged. However, the response does not give a clear overview of the main pattern: perceived risk is much higher than actual likelihood for every crime type, and perceived figures generally decline while actual figures rise slightly or remain stable. Some statements are unclear, such as “raised on second number,” and the actual figures are mostly not reported. The response is also 12 words below the 150-word minimum; the 13 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count. Develop the key comparisons and state the overall pattern explicitly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response follows a basic sequence, beginning with the chart’s subject and then moving through perceived and actual figures. This gives the reader some sense of the topic, and phrases such as “Moreover” and “In burglary crimes” attempt to connect points. However, the opening explanation of the four data groups is repetitive and does not establish a clear overview, while the remaining observations are presented as separate, loosely connected statements. Some links are difficult to follow, particularly “raised on second number” and “significant in years from 2009 to 2011.” Organise the report into a brief overview followed by grouped comparisons, for example perceived figures first and actual figures second, and use clear references to the years and crime types.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “perceived,” “actual,” “slight difference,” and “ratio,” so the reader can recognise the chart’s subject and some comparisons. The vocabulary is nevertheless repetitive and sometimes imprecise. “Ratio” is not the natural term for these percentages; “percentage” or “figure” would be clearer. Phrases such as “second number” and “significant” do not accurately describe the values or their relative size, and “four type of data” is awkward. Build a more precise range for describing charts, including terms such as “stood at,” “fell to,” “remained stable,” and “was considerably higher than.” This would make the comparisons easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences are short and follow a simple subject–verb pattern, such as “Actual car crimes are same in 2009 to 2011.” There is an attempt to use a longer construction in “Perceived car crimes of year 2010 to 2011 showing the ratio of 17,” but it lacks a finite verb. Errors in articles, agreement, and sentence formation occur frequently: “four type” needs a plural form, “A increase” has an incorrect article, and “Actual ratio … are” has a subject–verb agreement problem. The opening fragments also do not form complete sentences. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using structures such as “while” and “whereas”; check articles, verb forms, and agreement during revision.

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