Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrates the perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim by Buurglary, car crime and violent crime.

Overall, the percentage of car crime was high in perceived as compare with actual.

By Burglary the percentage shown in perceived danger of being a victim was at 15% during 2009/10, as it shows a decreased rate in 2010/11 around 13%. Further, looking at actual danger of being a victim stands at same during both the years in 2009/10 and 2010/11. Next, the crime by car was high during 2009/10 which was perceived at above 20% and stand lower near to 15% in 2010/11, as the actual victim of crime was remains unchanged by around 5% in 2009/10 as well as in 2010/11. lastly, the violent crime was at the same percentage as was in burglary of perceived during 2009/10 as well as in 2010/11, but stands at bove in actual of being a victim of crime.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the three crime categories and make relevant comparisons between perceived and actual risk, including the fall in perceived car crime from above 20% to around 15%. However, the overview is too narrow: it mentions only car crime, rather than summarising the broad gap between perceived and actual likelihood across all categories. Some details are inaccurate or unclear. For example, actual burglary rises slightly from about 2% to 2.5%, rather than remaining the same, and the final comparison for violent crime does not give clear figures. The response is also one word below the 150-word minimum; the eight words copied from the task prompt are excluded from the count. Add a fuller overview and report the main figures more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the chart, gives an overview, and then discusses burglary, car crime and violent crime. Linking expressions such as “Further,” “Next” and “lastly” help signal this order. However, the discussion is presented as one long body paragraph, and the progression becomes difficult to follow in places, particularly in the final sentence about violent crime. Some links are mechanical or do not clearly show the relationship between ideas, while repeated phrasing such as “the percentage … of being a victim” makes the account less smooth. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and details, and group the perceived figures and actual figures more systematically so comparisons are easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “likelihood,” and “percentage,” so the reader can recognise the subject of the chart. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning unclear. For instance, “the percentage of car crime was high in perceived” is not a natural way to describe perceived risk, and “actual danger” is less precise than “actual likelihood” or “actual rate.” There are also spelling errors, including “Buurglary” and “bove,” and repeated use of “stands” and “percentage.” Aim for accurate chart language and vary expressions such as “the proportion who perceived a risk” and “the recorded rate.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences with comparisons, using structures such as “as it shows a decreased rate” and “which was perceived at above 20%.” These attempts show some range, but complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the report difficult to interpret. Examples include “as compare with actual,” “the actual victim of crime was remains unchanged,” and “the violent crime was at the same percentage as was in burglary.” Verb forms, sentence construction and agreement need closer control. Practise writing shorter, complete comparison sentences first, then combine them accurately—for example, “Perceived burglary risk fell from about 15.5% to 13%, while the actual rate rose slightly.”

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