Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph compares the information regarding the perceived danger and actual livelihood of the victim of crime in two years in three crucial crimes, the data is given in percentage.

Overall, Car Crime are most popular crime throughout the period, while violent crime and burglary were at the same level having almost same number of crime rates.

In year 2009/10 car crimes were most perceived with around 22% while actual crime were at 4% approximately. Moreover, Violent crime and burglary were having almost same number of perceiving which was 15% approximately and actual was 3% and 2% respectively.

However, in 2010/11, perceived crime were reduced in all the sector, car crime were at 18% and violent crime and burglar were at 13% respectively and the number of actual crime were almost a same level which as in car crime and violent crime at 4% and 3% respectivly same as last year but a slight increase is noticed in Burglary which is at 3%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main comparison across the three crime types and both years, and your overview correctly notes that perceived figures are much higher than actual figures and that perceived car crime is highest. You also report the broad decline in perceived risk in 2010/11 and the small rise in actual burglary. Some details are less precise: the 2010/11 perceived figure for violent crime is about 13.5%, not the same as burglary at about 13%, and actual car crime remains around 4.5% rather than falling to 4%. The overview’s claim that car crime is the “most popular crime” is also unclear, since the chart measures perceived and actual likelihood, not popularity or crime totals. Use a clearer overview and distinguish risk estimates from recorded likelihood.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the two years. This gives the reader a workable progression, and transitions such as “Overall,” “Moreover,” and “However” help signal relationships between points. The comparison is generally easy to follow, although the final sentence becomes overloaded as it combines several crime types, figures, and year-on-year comparisons. Some references are also unclear, particularly “the number of actual crime were almost a same level which as in car crime,” where the comparison is difficult to interpret. To make the organisation more controlled, divide the final comparison into shorter sentences and group perceived figures separately from actual figures. This would retain the coherent structure while making links between data points more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “percentage,” and “slight increase,” so the reader can identify the main subject and comparisons. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or imprecise: “actual livelihood of the victim” does not express actual likelihood, “most popular crime” suggests popularity rather than risk, and “crucial crimes” is not a natural description of the categories. There are also repeated forms such as “crime” and “number,” and spelling errors including “respectivly.” Aim for precise chart language and natural collocations, for example “likelihood of victimisation,” “highest perceived risk,” and “recorded rate.” This would improve clarity and range without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “However” and clauses comparing the two years. The main meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries are noticeable. For example, “Car Crime are” should be “car crime was,” while “actual crime were” needs a singular or plural form that agrees with its subject. The opening sentence joins two independent clauses with a comma, and “which as in car crime” is grammatically incomplete. There are also inconsistent tense choices when describing the chart. Use complete sentences, check subject–verb agreement, and keep past-tense reporting consistent. More accurate control of these patterns would make your comparisons easier to understand.

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