Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares the perceived and actual likelihood of being victim of three types of crime-Buglary,Car crime and Violent crime over two consecutive periods 2009/10 and 2010/11.

Overall,By looking at the char it is obvious that preception of being victim of crime in all three categories are higher then the actual likelihood.

To begin with,Car crime which is having highest preception victim percentage over 20 % in 2009/10 dropped to almost 17 % by 2010/11 whereas the actual likelihood is also dropped but with not much difference where in 2009/10 it is almost 4.5% and 2010/11 it is roughly 4,2%.Similarly,Perception precentage for being victim of burglary also fall from over 15% in 2009/10 to approximately 13% in 2010/11 while actual likelihood rose a bit from around 3% in 2009/10 to roughly 3.5% in 2010/11.

Moving ahead,Perception for being the victim of voilent crime also dropped to almost 14% in 2010/11 where it was a bit over to 15% in 2009/10.Although,Actuall likelihood remained same for both consecutive year at alomst 3.7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the chart’s central contrast: perceived risk is higher than actual victimisation for all three crimes, and you compare both periods. The overview also notes the broad decline in perceived risk, while the body covers each category with relevant figures. This gives the response a clear, task-focused account. Some details, however, are inaccurate or unclear: actual car crime is about 4.5% in both years, not 4.2% in 2010/11; burglary rises from about 2% to 2.5%, rather than from 3% to 3.5%; and actual violent crime rises slightly, rather than remaining the same. More precise reporting of these small changes, alongside a clearer overview of the actual figures, would make the coverage more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs that group the crime types and compare the years. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with” and “Moving ahead” help signal progression, and the reader can generally follow the comparisons. However, some linking is mechanical, and punctuation around transitions is inconsistent: for example, “Similarly,Perception” and “Although,Actuall” run together or use a connector awkwardly. The final paragraph also combines violent-crime comparisons without clearly separating perceived from actual likelihood. Use paragraphing and transitions more selectively, and make each comparison’s subject explicit, to improve the flow and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual likelihood,” “dropped,” and “rose,” and you attempt some variation rather than repeating one verb throughout. The meaning is usually recoverable, but spelling and word-choice problems are noticeable: “preception,” “Buglary,” “voilent,” and “Actuall” reduce accuracy, while “preception victim percentage” and “which is having highest” are unnatural combinations. “Likelihood” and “perception” are also sometimes used imprecisely when describing the percentages. Aim for accurate, conventional collocations such as “the perceived likelihood of burglary” and “the actual rate of car crime,” and check spelling carefully. This would make the vocabulary more precise and fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparative sentences, including clauses with “whereas” and “while,” so there is some structural variety. However, control is uneven, and errors occur in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “the perception … are higher” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “being victim” needs an article or plural form. The opening phrase “Car crime which is having highest…” is not a well-formed clause, and “Although” is incorrectly used to begin the final comparison. Commas and spaces after full stops are also often missing. Build comparisons with complete, clearly punctuated clauses and check agreement and articles; this will make the intended relationships easier to understand.

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