Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the perceived danger and actual possibilities of being a victim of crime. The crimes include burglary, car crimes, violent crimes.

Overall, perceived crimes proportion was higher than the actual crime rates in all the years.Car crimes was believed to be the highest type of crime, while burglary and violent crime were expected to have a similar ratio.

To start with, in 2009 and 2010 car crime perceived percentage was more than 20%, however in reality it was less than 5%. Similarly, in 2010 and 2011 the car crime were expected to more than 15% of the crime, but in reality it only make up to 4% of crime.

In 2009 and 2010 burglary and violent crimes were veiwed to be 15% by proportion, however, in reality it only make up to nearly 2% and 3% of crime type respectively. In 2010 and 2011 both burglary and violent crime were considered to be 13% by proportion, but in actual data it was just above 2 % of crime type.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main contrast accurately: perceived likelihood is much higher than actual victimisation for all three crime types, and car crime is perceived as the most likely. You also compare both periods and include relevant figures, such as perceived car crime being above 20% in 2009/10 and around 17% in 2010/11. However, some details are imprecise: actual burglary was about 2–2.5%, not simply “just above 2%” in both categories, and the 2010/11 perceived figures for burglary and violent crime were about 13% and 13.5%, rather than both 13%. The overview could also report the broad decline in perceived figures and slight rise in actual figures between periods. These omissions and approximations leave some features less fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs comparing the crime types across the periods. Phrases such as “Overall,” “To start with,” and “Similarly” help signal the direction of the discussion, and the reader can follow the main comparisons. However, the progression is somewhat mechanical, with repeated “in reality” and “however” constructions. The overview’s reference to “all the years” is also less precise than naming the two periods, and the final paragraph groups burglary and violent crime without clearly distinguishing their actual figures in 2010/11. Use more precise referencing and vary the links between comparisons to make the organisation smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “percentage,” and “proportion,” so the main meaning is generally clear. There is some repetition, however, and several word choices or collocations are unnatural: “perceived crimes proportion” and “expected to more than 15% of the crime” do not express the data clearly. “Actual possibilities” is also less suitable than “actual likelihood” or “actual rates.” Spelling errors such as “veiwed” detract from accuracy, while “car crimes was” shows difficulty selecting the correct form. Aim for precise chart language and consistent terms, for example “the perceived likelihood of burglary” and “the actual rate of car crime.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including contrast clauses with “however” and comparisons using “while.” Most sentences communicate the intended comparison, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “Car crimes was believed” has subject–verb disagreement, and “the car crime were expected to more than 15%” is missing a suitable verb construction. In “it only make up to 4%,” the verb form is incorrect; use “made up” or “accounted for.” There are also article and number issues in phrases such as “the crime” and “both burglary and violent crime were considered.” Improve control of verb forms, agreement, and sentence punctuation while retaining the useful range of structures you attempt.

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