Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the bar graph gives information about the noticed dangers and the chances to be a person effected by a criminal

the graph below shows the percentages of crimes such as, burglary, car crime, and violent crimes. the highest percentage being car crime, the lowest being burglary.

overall, it can be seen that

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the chart’s general subject and name all three crime types, and you correctly note that car crime has the highest figures while burglary is generally lowest. However, the response does not summarise the main comparisons between perceived and actual risk or between the two years. The overview is unfinished (“overall, it can be seen that”), and no figures or trends are reported, so the task is addressed only minimally. The response is also substantially below the required 150 words, leaving too little space to select and explain key features. To improve, complete a clear overview and compare the much higher perceived percentages with the low actual rates, noting how the figures change from 2009/10 to 2010/11.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence introduces the chart, a second sentence names the crime categories, and “overall” signals an intended overview. These elements provide a starting structure, but the final sentence is incomplete and the ideas do not develop into a logical summary. There are no comparisons or supporting details to connect, and the paragraphing does not distinguish an overview from specific data. Build a short, complete sequence: introduce what is measured, state the main overall pattern, then compare the categories and years. Use linking expressions only where they clarify relationships, such as “whereas” for perceived versus actual risk.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “percentages,” “burglary,” “car crime,” and “violent crimes,” and the reader can identify the subject of the chart. However, the range is narrow and several expressions are imprecise or unnatural: “noticed dangers” does not clearly convey perceived risk, while “chances to be a person effected by a criminal” is an awkward way to describe the likelihood of being a crime victim. “Effected” is also the wrong word form in this context. Use concise, accurate chart language such as “perceived risk,” “actual likelihood,” and “victim of crime.” More precise vocabulary would help you describe the comparisons rather than merely list categories.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt simple sentence forms, and the opening communicates the broad topic. However, grammatical control is uneven, and the response shows little range beyond basic clauses. In “the graph below shows the percentages of crimes such as, burglary, car crime, and violent crimes,” the construction after “such as” is punctuated incorrectly, and the following phrase, “the highest percentage being car crime,” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. The final clause, “overall, it can be seen that,” is also unfinished. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check punctuation around examples. For instance, state that car crime has the highest perceived and actual figures, then add a separate sentence comparing the years.

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