Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares the percentage of people who belived they would be a victim of crime and the percentage who acutally were victim for burglary car crime and violent crime in 2009/10to 2010/11.

Overall the percevied risk of crime was much higher than the actual risk for all crime types in the both year.car crime was thought to be the most liklely.while the precived likelihood decreased slightly in 2010/11 the actual crime ramined very low at around 2%to 5%

In 2009/10 just over 21percent of people thought they would experience car crime but only 5% acutally did simillarly about15%,16%believed they would be victim of burglary and violent crime whereas the real figure were only around 2%and 3%respectively

In the following year percevied risk fell for all categories the fear of burgulary dropped from 15%to 13% car crime from21%to 17%and violent crime from 16% to 14% .In contrast actual crime rates stayed almost the same within burglary and violent crime rising slightly to about3%and 4% while car remained

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the chart’s central contrast accurately: perceived likelihood is much higher than actual victimisation in every category, and car crime is perceived as the greatest risk. You also compare both periods and include relevant figures, such as the fall in perceived car crime from about 21% to 17%. This covers the main task features well. Some details, however, are imprecise: the 2009/10 perceived figures were about 15.5% for burglary and violent crime, rather than simply “about 15%” and “16%,” and the actual burglary figure was about 2%, not a general 2% for both categories. The final sentence is unfinished, leaving the comparison of actual car crime in the second year incomplete. More precise reporting and a complete ending would make the overview and comparisons more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs comparing the two years. The progression from the overall pattern to specific figures is logical, and phrases such as “Overall,” “In 2009/10,” and “In the following year” help guide the reader. However, cohesion is sometimes weakened by run-on presentation and missing sentence boundaries, particularly in the overview and the final paragraph. The last clause, “while car remained,” is incomplete and interrupts the progression. Some comparisons are also compressed into long sequences of figures, making relationships less clear. Use full stops consistently, separate the comparisons into manageable sentences, and finish the final-year comparison to make the organisation smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing the chart, including “percentage,” “perceived risk,” “actual crime rates,” “dropped,” and “rising slightly.” These choices communicate the main comparisons and show some range beyond basic repetition. However, spelling errors are frequent and noticeable, including “belived,” “acutally,” “percevied,” “simillarly,” and “burgulary.” There are also awkward or imprecise phrases, such as “would be a victim for burglary” and “the real figure,” where more natural chart language would improve clarity. Aim to use accurate forms such as “believed they would be victims of” and “the actual figure,” and proofread carefully for spelling. More precise terms such as “victimisation rate” can also help vary your wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “while” and a comparison introduced by “whereas.” The main meaning is generally recoverable, but grammatical control is limited by errors in sentence boundaries, tense, articles, and sentence completion. For example, “the actual crime ramined very low” needs a correctly formed verb, while “the real figure were” has subject–verb disagreement. The opening sentence also lacks clear punctuation between the crime categories and the time period, and the final sentence ends with the incomplete clause “while car remained.” Practise building complete sentences around one clear comparison, checking agreement and articles, and using full stops and commas to separate ideas.

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