Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares the proportion of assumed danger and real happened likelihood of being a victim of crime during the period 2009 to 2011.

Overall, it is evident that the percentages of crime is divided into three different types such as Burglary, car crime and violent crime. The highest proportion is recorded for perceived (2009 to 2010) car crime. While the lowest proportion is experienced by actual crime victim in all the crime types.

The data reveals that between 2009 and 2010, the highest percentage accounts for a perceived car crime stood at roughly 23%, which marked the highest figure, followed by Burglary and violent crime, at approximately 16% for both. While the figure for actual crime consumed nearly 2% for burglary, which remained the lowest figure, followed y violent crimes and car crime, at just over 3% and 4% respectively.

During the period [redacted phone], the figure has dropped for the perceived crime in all three types, which stood at approximately 13% for burglary, 17% for car crime and 14% for violent crime. In contrast, the largest proportion of 4% is observed for actual likelihood of being victime of car crime.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s main contrast: perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation, and car crime has the highest perceived figure. You also compare the three crime types and describe the fall in perceived figures in 2010/11. However, some details are inaccurate or incomplete: perceived car crime in 2009/10 is about 21%, not 23%, and actual car crime is about 4.5%, rather than simply 4%. The overview says actual crime is lowest across the categories, but does not summarise the broadly stable, slightly rising actual figures in the later period. Your account of 2010/11 also omits the actual burglary and violent-crime values. More precise reporting of these comparisons would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two periods. This makes the main comparisons easy to locate, and transitions such as “Overall,” “The data reveals,” and “In contrast” help guide the reader. The organisation is coherent, though some linking is mechanical and a few sentence connections are awkward. For example, “While the lowest proportion…” is a fragment-like continuation, and the repeated “While” at the start of the next paragraph does not create a fully smooth progression. The final paragraph focuses on perceived figures before mentioning only one actual figure. Grouping perceived and actual data more systematically within each period would strengthen the progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of chart-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “approximately,” “highest figure,” and “dropped,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are, however, several inaccurate or unnatural choices that limit precision. “Assumed danger” and “real happened likelihood” are not natural ways to describe perceived and actual risk, while “actual crime consumed nearly 2%” uses an unsuitable verb. “Victime” is also misspelled, and “followed y” contains a typing error. Some repetition of “figure” and “percentage” could be reduced by using terms such as “rate” or “share” where appropriate. More accurate collocations and careful proofreading would make the vocabulary more controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses beginning with “While” and “which,” and most of the intended comparisons remain understandable. Some grammatical errors persist, however. In “the percentages of crime is divided,” the plural subject does not agree with “is,” and “the highest percentage accounts for a perceived car crime stood” combines incompatible verb structures. The sentence beginning “While the figure for actual crime…” is not properly attached to a main clause. There are also tense and article problems in phrases such as “the figure has dropped” when describing a completed chart period. Aim to build complete sentences around each comparison and check agreement and verb forms; this would improve accuracy without sacrificing complexity.

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