Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The column chart compares the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Overall, it clearly seen that car crime stands with the largest percentage, which was perceived in all mentioned periods and it's actual likelihood of being victim also has the largest number. In addition, burglary and violent crime shared the same numbers in both views.

In one hand, among three crimes car crimes perceived holds above 20%, in 2009/10, but decreased into 17% in 2010/11, thats a signiciant change. Furthermore, burglary and violent crime holds the same percentage in both years in perceiving crime and both fall from approximately 15% to 13%.

On the other hand, actual livelihood of being a victim has lower perctange, thats a great thing. In both views , burglary and violent crime holds the lowest proportion accounted for below 5%, whereas, car crime also stayed subtle in both years accounted for 4%.

In conclusion, though the perceived damger has big rise but the actual livlihood as crime has lower percentage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s main contrast: perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation, and car crime is highest in both measures. You also include relevant comparisons, such as perceived car crime falling from about 21% to 17% and actual figures remaining below 5%. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear. Burglary and violent crime do not share the same figures in both views: for example, actual violent crime is higher than burglary in each year. The statement that both perceived figures “fall” from about 15% to 13% also overlooks violent crime’s slight difference between years. The conclusion refers to a “big rise,” which conflicts with the overall decline in perceived figures. Select the key trends more precisely and support them with clear comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, two detail paragraphs and a conclusion. The contrast between perceived and actual likelihood gives the report a useful organising principle. However, progression is weakened by repeated or confusing points: the overview says burglary and violent crime share the same numbers, while the detail paragraph repeats this claim without clarifying the differences. Linking phrases such as “In one hand” and “On the other hand” are used mechanically, and the final conclusion introduces a rise that does not follow from the preceding account. Group the figures consistently—for example, discuss perceived values together and actual values together—and use transitions that accurately signal comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual likelihood,” “percentage” and “proportion,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range and control are limited, with several inaccurate word choices and collocations that make parts difficult to interpret. “Actual livelihood” is not the intended meaning, while “car crime also stayed subtle” and “car crimes perceived holds” are unnatural. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “signiciant,” “perctange,” “damger” and “livlihood.” Aim for precise chart language and check spelling carefully. Useful alternatives include “actual victimisation,” “remained relatively stable,” and “accounted for approximately.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a contrast introduced by “though,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure and agreement occur frequently: “it clearly seen” needs a form of “be,” “car crime stands” does not agree naturally with the subject, and “burglary and violent crime holds” should use a plural verb. The sentence beginning “In one hand” is also structurally awkward, and the final sentence lacks a clear grammatical relationship between its clauses. Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, particularly around commas. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and build comparisons with complete, direct sentences, such as “Perceived car-crime risk fell from 21% to 17%.”

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