Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given graph illustrates the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Overall, it clear that the proportion of perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim in car crime is highest among other two crimes. Meanwhile, the percentage of perceived crime and actual likelihood of being a victim in burglary and voilent crime is almost similer.

Looking first at the car crime, the percentage of perceived danger is almost 21% in 2009/10, but the figure dropped to approximately 13% from 2010 to 2011. Meanhwile, the actual likelihood of being a victim is around 4% in 2009/10 which is remained same in 2010/11.

Turning to the burglary and voilent crime, the percentage of perceived danger is around 16% in 2009/10 and decreased to almost 14% in 2010/11. Meanwhile, the actual likelihood of being victim in burglary is slightly lower in 2009/10 which is around 3%, as compared to 4% of violent crime.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and provide an overview, correctly noting that car crime has the highest perceived and actual figures. You also report the broad decline in perceived risk from 2009/10 to 2010/11. However, the overview is imprecise: burglary and violent crime are similar in perceived figures, but their actual figures are not described comparatively, and the claim that car-crime perception fell to about 13% is inaccurate; it was about 17%. The final paragraph also gives the actual burglary and violent-crime figures as roughly 3% and 4%, whereas they were closer to 2–2.5% and 3–3.5%. The response is 136 words, below the 150-word minimum, and several key comparisons are omitted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs grouping car crime separately from burglary and violent crime. Sequencing phrases such as “Looking first” and “Turning to” help signal these shifts. However, the comparison within each paragraph is not always clearly organised. For example, the car-crime paragraph moves from perceived risk to actual likelihood but does not clearly compare both years, while the final paragraph combines two crime types without systematically distinguishing their figures. “Meanwhile” is repeated and sometimes introduces a contrast that is not fully explained. A clearer pattern—reporting perceived figures across all categories, then actual figures, or comparing each crime type consistently—would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “perceived danger,” “actual likelihood,” “percentage,” and “dropped,” so the topic remains understandable. There is some variation in how you describe change, such as “dropped” and “decreased.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “the proportion of perceived danger,” “percentage of perceived crime,” and “which is remained same.” Spelling errors such as “voilent,” “similer,” and “Meanhwile” also reduce accuracy and polish. Aim for precise chart language, for example “the perceived risk of burglary” and “the actual victimisation rate,” and check spelling carefully. More accurate phrasing would also help distinguish perceived risk from actual likelihood.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, using contrast clauses with “but” and “while” and time references such as “in 2009/10.” Meaning is generally recoverable, but errors recur in sentence structure and verb forms. For instance, “Overall, it clear” needs a verb, while “which is remained same” incorrectly combines “is” with a past-tense verb. In “the percentage … is around 16% … and decreased,” the tense shifts awkwardly; use “was … and decreased.” The phrase “being victim” also needs an article (“being a victim”). These issues make some comparisons less clear. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and check each sentence for a complete subject and verb, while retaining the useful range of linking clauses you already attempt.

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