Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given chart describe a data of burglary, car crime, and violent crime that perceived, and their actual value in two thousand nine, ten, and eleven.

Burglary data that perceived in two thousand nine, ten was more than fifteen percent but their actual victim ratio observed was under five percent. In two thousand ten and eleven the burglary perceived ratio was under fifteen percent wile their actual ratio was little more than two thousand nine and ten.

Car crime perceived cases was more than twenty percent, and their actual was less then five percent reported in two thousand nine and ten. The crime ratio that perceived in two thousand ten and eleven was less then twenty percent but their actual ratio was same as previous year.

Violent crime that perceived in two thousand nine and ten was fifteen percent but their actual was less then five percent, same perceived crime in two thousand ten and eleven was less than fifteen percent but acual was less five percent.

So overall perceived ratio was three time higher then actual reports of crime cases.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify all three crime types and compare perceived with actual figures across both periods, so the response is relevant to the chart. You also capture the broad pattern that perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation. However, the overview is too general: “three time higher” does not accurately describe the gap, which varies considerably by category, and the chart shows perceived figures falling in every category while actual figures rise slightly or remain stable. Some details are imprecise: for example, car crime perception falls from about 21% to 17%, but this change is not clearly stated. A clearer overview and more accurate comparisons of the main trends would make the report more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable sequence: an introduction, separate discussion of burglary, car crime and violent crime, and a concluding generalisation. This makes the information reasonably easy to follow. The repeated category-by-category pattern also helps readers locate the comparisons. However, the organisation is somewhat mechanical, and the final sentence does not bring together the most important trends. Linking expressions such as “while” and “same” are used, but relationships between the figures are not always expressed clearly. For example, the changes from 2009/10 to 2010/11 could be grouped into a concise overview before the details. Clearer paragraphing and more precise connections between comparisons would improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “ratio,” and “percent,” and the crime categories are generally identified clearly. However, the range is limited and several expressions are unnatural or imprecise, such as “a data of burglary” and “actual victim ratio observed.” Repetition of “crime ratio” and “perceived” also makes the report less flexible. There are noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “wile,” “less then,” and “acual,” which can distract the reader. Aim for standard chart language such as “the proportion who perceived a risk” and “the actual victimisation rate,” and use verbs such as “fell,” “remained stable,” and “rose slightly” to describe changes precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most sentences communicate a basic comparison, and you attempt to use clauses with “that” and contrast with “but” and “while.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence structure, agreement, articles and verb forms. For example, “The given chart describe” needs subject–verb agreement, while “Burglary data that perceived” is not a complete, well-formed clause. The phrase “their actual ratio was little more than” also lacks a clear comparison structure. Tense and number are not consistently controlled, and several long sentences combine ideas without clear grammatical links. Practise building accurate simple comparison sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking agreement and sentence completeness.

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