Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the given data depicts percived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime and by the crime type. it mainly consist of 3 major crime types: burglary,car crime and violent crime and this data is comparing percived and actual crimes of year 2009/10 to year 2010/11.

as we can see that in perceiving burglary year 2009/10 is slighty higher than the year 2010/11 by 2-3% but in actual case it was just 1% gap between both years , in case of car crimes perceiving percentage of year 2009/10 is again on higher side as compared to year 2010/11 it was higher by 8-9% and in actual case the numbers were exactly same in both the years and lastly in case of violent crime perceived rates of year 2009/10 are again coming on the higher side as compared to 2010/11 and in actual again both the year has same rate of violent crime

so we conclude that in 2010/11 crime rates have been decreased from the last year 2009/10. which is a very good sign for the law and order of this place

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify all three crime types and compare perceived with actual figures across the two periods, so the response is relevant to the chart. However, the overview is incomplete and the final claim that “crime rates have been decreased” is not supported: the chart shows perceived likelihood falling, while actual likelihood rises slightly for burglary and violent crime and stays level for car crime. Several comparisons are also inaccurate or too vague. For example, perceived car crime falls from about 21% to 17%, a difference of roughly four percentage points, not 8–9%; actual burglary rises from about 2% to 2.5%, rather than showing a one-point gap. A clearer overview and accurate key figures are needed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the chart, discusses burglary, car crime and violent crime, then gives a conclusion. This makes the main topic understandable. However, the information is presented in one long paragraph, and the repeated pattern “in case of” and “in actual case” makes the progression mechanical. The opening does not provide a clear summary of the main overall contrast, while the final conclusion repeats a broad claim rather than drawing together the comparisons accurately. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the detailed comparisons, and organise the figures by perceived versus actual likelihood or by crime type. Linking phrases such as “by contrast” and “meanwhile” can clarify relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “percentage” and “compared,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “coming on the higher side,” “in actual case” and “good sign for the law and order of this place.” Spelling errors, including “percived” and “slighty,” are noticeable, and “perceiving” is not the appropriate form for describing the chart’s perceived figures. Aim for concise, conventional reporting language: for example, “the perceived likelihood was higher,” “the actual rate remained stable,” and “the figures fell by around four percentage points.” Avoid adding evaluative language that the chart itself does not support.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences to compare several categories, and the reader can generally follow the intended meaning. However, the response relies heavily on run-on sentences joined by commas, with limited control of complex structures. There are frequent problems with articles, agreement and verb forms: “the data … consist” should be “the data … consist of” or “the chart shows”; “both the year has” should be “both years had”; and “crime rates have been decreased” should be “the perceived rates decreased.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly at sentence beginnings and around the long comparisons. Use shorter, complete sentences and check subject–verb agreement and tense consistency when describing the two periods.

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