Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given chart illustrates the percentile of perceived and actual livelihood of being a victim of crime.

Overall, it is clear that the car crime was recording more victim than burglary and violent crime in given years .

From the chart , it is clear that the burglary and violent crime was having similar record in perceived which was 15 and 13 percent in 2009/10 and 2010/11 . Meanwhile , burglary got 2 and 3 percent as the actual victim in the given years . However , violent showed the constant rate of percent which was 3.5% .

Moving towards remaining data , car crime received 21 % and 17 % of perceived victims in 2009/10 to 2010/11 . In the same years it attained 4% as the active victims of crime

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s main broad pattern: perceived risk is higher than actual victimisation, and car crime has the highest figures. You also include several relevant values. However, the account is only partial and some details are inaccurate or unclear. For example, burglary and violent crime are not both 15% and 13% in the perceived data: the figures are about 15.5% and 13% for burglary, and 15.5% and 13.5% for violent crime. The claim that violent crime was constant is also incorrect, as its actual rate rises from about 3% to 3.5%. The overview could better summarise the overall decline in perceived risk and slight increases in actual rates. The response is 18 words below the required minimum, limiting its coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a brief overview, and separate discussion of burglary/violent crime and car crime. This gives the reader a coherent route through the information, and phrases such as “Overall” and “Meanwhile” help signal relationships. However, progression is not always smooth: “Moving towards remaining data” is vague, and the final paragraph ends abruptly without completing the comparison of actual car-crime figures across both years. Some linking is mechanical, while spacing around commas and full stops is inconsistent. To strengthen the organisation, group the perceived figures together and the actual figures together, then use clear comparisons to connect the two years and crime types.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “rate,” and “percent,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate enough to make parts of the report awkward or unclear. “Percentile” does not mean percentage, and “livelihood of being a victim” does not express likelihood. Likewise, “recording more victim,” “received … of perceived victims,” and “active victims” are not natural descriptions of the data. The vocabulary range is limited, with repeated use of “crime,” “percent,” and “given years.” Aim for precise reporting language such as “likelihood,” “proportion,” “the figure stood at,” and “actual victimisation,” while checking that each phrase fits its meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple statements and longer sentences, including contrast structures such as “Meanwhile” and “However,” and the main message can usually be followed. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with subject–verb agreement and tense: “the burglary and violent crime was having” should use a plural subject and a more suitable reporting verb, while “car crime was recording” is also incorrectly formed. Articles and sentence construction are sometimes awkward, as in “the car crime” and “violent showed the constant rate.” Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, with spaces before commas and full stops. More accurate simple comparisons, combined with a few controlled complex sentences, would improve clarity and grammatical control.

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