Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given graph illustrates the ratio of perseived and actual likelihood of being victim of crime by crime type in year 2009\10 and 2010\11. Car crimes has the highest ratio in both types in both years, while burglary crimes are at lowest,

The ratio of burglary crimes is same as the voilent crimes. Around 15% in the perceived year 2009\10, below 5% in the actual 2009\10, as same as in actual 2010\11. The proportion of burglary and violent crimes in the perceived year 2010\11 is below 15%. The highest percentage in the table is above 20% for car crimes in the perceived year 2009\10, ratio of car crimes in the perceived year 2010\11 is above 15%, meanwhile the ratio for the car crimes in both actual years 2009\10 and 2010\11 is slightly below 5%. The table is followed as car crimes at top and the remaining burglary and voilent crimes are following with the same ratio.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main broad pattern: car crime has the highest figures, while burglary is generally among the lowest, and you compare perceived with actual likelihood. However, the overview is incomplete and some comparisons are unclear or inaccurate. For example, burglary and violent crime are not consistently “the same”: perceived figures are similar, but actual violent-crime figures are higher than burglary in both years. You also omit the overall fall in perceived likelihood from 2009/10 to 2010/11 and the slight rises in actual figures. Phrases such as “below 5%” give only broad approximations where clearer comparisons would help. To strengthen the response, summarise these contrasting trends and support them with a few accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence, beginning with a general statement and then discussing crime categories, so the reader can identify the topic and some comparisons. However, the organisation does not develop into a clear overview followed by well-grouped details. The second paragraph repeats that car crime is highest and that burglary and violent crime are similar, rather than progressing systematically through the years or separating perceived from actual figures. Linking phrases such as “meanwhile” help signal contrast, but “as same as” and “The table is followed as” do not express the intended relationships clearly. Use a distinct overview, then group comparisons by perceived and actual likelihood, with accurate linking language and less repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “ratio,” “proportion,” “percentage,” “perceived,” and “actual,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing a bar chart. “Ratio” is repeatedly used where “percentage” or “figure” is more suitable, and “the table is followed as” does not convey a clear meaning. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “perseived” and “voilent,” and awkward phrases such as “in the perceived year.” Aim for more precise chart language and vary it naturally: for example, describe figures as rising, falling, remaining stable, or being higher than another category. Proofreading spelling would also improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, but control is uneven, and errors in sentence structure and agreement sometimes make relationships difficult to follow. For example, “Car crimes has the highest ratio” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “The ratio of burglary crimes is same as the voilent crimes” is missing an article and is awkwardly constructed. The opening sentence also lacks a clear grammatical connection to the following clause, and the final sentence, “The table is followed as…,” is not a well-formed construction. Most sentences rely on similar patterns, with limited accurate use of complex structures. Practise building clear comparison sentences, checking articles and agreement, and using punctuation to separate complete ideas.

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