Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the bar illustrates the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime by crime type.

overall, there are three types of crime since burglary has a huge percentage in perceived likelihood 2009/10, while the lowest is perceived likelihood 2010/11, that's quite similar to another type of crime which is violence crime, instead we have the third one wich named car crime , this had a massive percentage in perceived likelihood and 2009/10 and 2010/11.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s topic and mention all three crime types, but the response does not adequately summarise the data. The claim that burglary has a “huge percentage” in perceived likelihood in 2009/10 is inaccurate: car crime is highest, at about 21%, while burglary and violent crime are both around 15.5%. You also do not report the actual-likelihood figures or clearly compare the two years; the chart shows perceived likelihood falling for all three crimes, while actual likelihood changes only slightly. The overview is difficult to interpret and does not select the main features clearly. The response is 62 words, below the required 150 words; the 15 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from that count. Include a clear overview and support it with accurate comparisons and key figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening identifies the chart, followed by a sentence beginning “overall.” However, the ideas do not progress in a clear sequence, and the long overview sentence combines several comparisons without explaining how they relate. Phrases such as “while the lowest is perceived likelihood 2010/11” leave the reader unsure which crime or value is being described. The transition “instead” does not establish a clear contrast, and there is no separate paragraph for the main details. To improve, use a short introduction, a focused overview, and a details paragraph that compares perceived and actual figures by crime type or year.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual likelihood,” and the crime labels, so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or repetitive. “Huge percentage” and “massive percentage” are informal and do not describe the chart precisely; “likelihood” or “proportion” would be more suitable. “Violence crime” is not the standard term used in the chart, and “third one wich named” makes the category difficult to identify. Use accurate chart language such as “the highest perceived risk,” “the actual rate,” and “violent crime.” Check spelling and use neutral, precise wording rather than emphatic adjectives.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to form a longer sentence using “while,” and the opening communicates the general subject. However, the response relies on a narrow range of sentence patterns, and the extended sentence is difficult to follow because its clauses are not controlled clearly. For example, “while the lowest is perceived likelihood 2010/11” lacks a clear grammatical relationship, and “this had a massive percentage in perceived likelihood and 2009/10 and 2010/11” has an unclear structure. Capitalisation is also inconsistent: “overall” should begin with a capital letter, and the response needs clearer sentence punctuation. Practise writing shorter, complete comparisons first, then combine them with accurate clauses such as “Perceived risk fell from … to ….”

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